Comment fic meme #2

Mar 05, 2012 15:28

After the first round of got_exchange we had a surprisingly successful comment fic meme going for a while (here's a list of all the fics that were written last time), so I thought it might be fun to do this again. (Like last time, it's posted on the mod account journal because I don't want to enable anonymous comments on the exchange community.)

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 janie_tangerine March 8 2012, 12:27:40 UTC
It’s ridiculous, and probably embarrassing, that he comes when she turns her scarred cheek and runs it over the scar tissue placed where his right hand should have been.

But the sight of it and the feeling of it are too much and he’s already taut as a string ready to snap, and the moment it happens he moans out her name and comes against her hand as his fingers grip her hip so hard that she’ll probably bruise. He’s tempted to arch off the bed, to move, to twist, but her knees are still around his sides, and she’s keeping him mostly still. And then his blood is singing in the same way it did when he crossed his sword with hers for the first time, there are spots of color beneath his eyelids and when he closes his eyes and just lets go against her hand, there’s such bliss in his release that he feels almost as if he’s floating into thin air.

When he comes to, she’s lying next to him; she got rid of the breeches, but she’s still wearing the shirt. One of his own - it’s just a bit tight at her chest, but it fits her nonetheless. And she has a hand on his neck, warm and almost grounding.

“I hope that our debts are settled now,” she says. And it’s obvious that she meant something else.

“I wish all the payments I had to receive were like this,” he answers. Hopefully she’ll understand that what it really means is that he hopes she does it again at some point.

“Good. Well, you had said you were hoping for something else -”

“Wench, you know it’s your call. I think I can live with not outright fucking you every damned time.”

The corner of her mouth quirks up again as she moves closer, her hand still there on his neck. “Most men would expect that. Then again, you aren’t most men.”

“Well, most certainly you aren’t most women. But you haven’t seen me complaining about that either, have you?”

She sighs, as if she won’t even dignify him with an answer, but he knows she understood what he meant.

And then she reaches up with her other hand, her index finger still wet and sticky; when she places it at the corner of his mouth, he doesn’t hesitate before parting his lips and letting her push it inside. And while he tastes bitterness on his tongue as he runs it over her rough fingertip, he starts thinking about how he’s going to talk her into holding him down against the bed next time.

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 iorwen107 March 8 2012, 19:36:16 UTC
I'm at work so I will have to wait to read the porn but I want you to know I am insanely excited that you filled this!

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 janie_tangerine March 8 2012, 20:14:33 UTC
Ee I hope you like it when you get to it ;) and well it was there, so lonely and tempting, I had to give it a shot...

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 iorwen107 March 8 2012, 22:59:07 UTC
Just read it on the train ride home. Somebody get me a bucket of ice and a cold shower because I'm all aflame! I'm sure the people sitting beside me could tell I was reading smut because it was freezing outside and I was all flushed! lol
I really loved how you still kept to character especially with Brienne being a little unsure of herself and how she should behave. I could totally see that, and totally see Jaime having a naughty streak and a filthy mouth! And I really loved the last part where Brienne takes control and basically makes love to his stump, something Cersei could never do for Jaime. You did a fab job!

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 janie_tangerine March 9 2012, 00:59:47 UTC
Well that's what I call feeling accomplished! ;) or well, if it worked as a mini heating system I'll totally allow myself to feel accomplished :D

And that said thanks so much! It's totally great to hear that they felt IC through this - while in my headcanon given time and practice and Jaime coaxing her with his filthy mouth Brienne totally tops I also felt like I couldn't just jump into part three out of the blue. And phew it's totally awesome to know that the last part worked for you, I hadn't planned on it happening but it felt like a good conclusion. (Also one of the endless reasons why I ship them is that she likes all of him, missing hand or not, so that might have played a part..) again, thank you! :D I'm really glad that you liked this. And that it was a useful remedy against cold weather.. ;)

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 iorwen107 March 9 2012, 11:18:58 UTC
most useful as a heating system of course you left me endlessly sexually frustrated but I forgive you!

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 fallingtowers March 8 2012, 22:01:11 UTC
Hah, now I can finally comment! I was at the office when I received the notification that this prompt had been filled, and while my workplace is fairly relaxed, I certainly didn't want to test the limits of this tolerance. :)

Anyway, thank ever so much for tackling this -- and at such length! You really don't have to be insecure about writing het smut in the future - I'd say this was nothing to feel doubtful about. I particularly like how you tied in the porny bits with the character development within their relationships - Brienne learning to admit what she wants and to go for it and Jaime having to figure out how to be with someone whom he still has to learn how to read (even with genuine attraction and affection, there won't be any miraculous understanding...). And the way their old injuries become part of what turns them on and moves them emotionally was an unexpected, but really moving touch.

Thanks again!

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Re: fill: with a wonder and a wild desire, jaime/brienne, dirty talk + consensual power play, 5/5 janie_tangerine March 9 2012, 00:42:26 UTC
Being one who tends to read porn while in the school library with too many people looking over my shoulder I totally get the workplace problem. ;)

That said thanks so much! :D I'm really glad that this worked for you - that prompt was seriously too good and I was really hoping that it'd deliver (and that the dirty talk wouldn't sound terrible, so it's good to have a confirm that I didn't fail miserably on that front ;) ). And it's totally great to know that the character development in this did work for you too - I figured that considering how they're wired they wouldn't jump straight into part three over there. And it's totally great to know that you liked the surprise!scars/injuries-as-a-turn-on thing, I hadn't really planned for it to happen but it felt fitting to be in the closing part so I just went for it. Thanks so very much again ♥!

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