omg ok I'm soooo sorry this comment is so late after this was even posted but... like... why was this so good?! LMAO it's been like, what, two weeks and there are still bits to this that I'm discovering on a second (ok more like fourth) read-through >__<
tbh I'm not a huge fan of markbum (or maybe more accurately I don't really notice them?) but you've spun their relationship sooo believably here - both the dynamic (hyungline ;_;) and the progression. mark often gets mischaracterized in fic as this secretly ott person or as this totally silent weirdo but you've struck such a good balance here lmao I'm so like *mouth open in shock* I LIKE YOUR MARK SO MUCH!! HE MAKES SO MUCH SENSE?? your characterization in general, like jb is sooo good. he's also a hard voice to get but you've really nailed him. even the opening scene - taking the split second to make sure mark's okay first before yelling at him LMAO, your on-point humor in general tempered by moments of maturity/clarity - I like that this fic is both about markbum and mark and jb separately, especially jb. his feelings on gotstar are so.. complex... it's so delicious... how can someone be so mature and yet so bullheaded >__< and ahh the markbum is so good - I love the way you lay out the tension and the foundation for their relationship. Their relationship isn't as obvious as Mark and Jackson's, or as deep as Jaebum and Jinyoung's, but it's there, dependable, steady, a port for days of stormy seas. / What he wants to tell Mark is that it's okay for him to open up to Jaebum. They have this shared rock between them called GOTSTAR, weathered by their history together, and no matter what their future holds, that rock will hold firm. this really gets to why I don't notice markbum but it's such a good explanation for them?? HONESTLY I'M IN AWE... I left this fic so fired up like HELL YEAH MARKBUM4LYFE (also I'm fucking crying: "Make some noise when you move!" he barks.) your description of their first meeting and how it sets the tone for the rest of the relationship is so ♥♥
UR PITCH PERFECT SIDE CHARACTERS?? WTF? HOW DID U GET THEM SO WELL? "He looked totally awesome midair though, want to see the pic I got?" Jackson digs out his cell phone. ping pong jackson, bouncing between regret/apology and Getting the Perfect Shot (his folders of mark pictures al;kd;aklamdla), Jinyoung visibly melts, despite his arm shooting backwards to shove away Jackson sneaking towards the take-out. I'M SORRY I'M JR TRASH (the markjin is Cute), bambam's irreverent questions sjdkhgs, yugyeom wishing ill on jr omg lmao, lovely lines like this: As a kid he must have had a label maker and used it to conquer the world, proving the strength of his existence based on how many nooks and crannies he could decorate with his name. wahhh king of the world jackson, this perfect image, "Diss! Wow! You're calling me weird? You want to have a weird contest?" / "What does that mean? You can't possibly think I'm weirder than you?" wait sorry again I'm also jinson trash I guess.. UR GREAT LINES UR GREAT HUMOR!! I don't even have anything insightful to say anymore asklfja i'm sorry i'm just posting lines I like u__u
finally, this perfect ideal ending T__T I love your writing, you capture their individual voices so well but you also get this great, meaty tension IT'S SO REAL omg when jb totally misunderstand's mark's hesitation I wanted to scream but also it's SOOO REAL like this is So Real lmao like the feelings hurt me so bad because it's just like omg nooo this Too Real confrontation and misunderstanding >__< It was only the possibility of losing Mark that made Jaebum realize how deep that desire ran. Miles and miles of uncharted territory, tunneled within him throughout their years together, waiting to be graced by light. By Mark. this beautiful line and then this beautiful gotstar ending, I'm honestly misty-eyed THANK U SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS
tbh I'm not a huge fan of markbum (or maybe more accurately I don't really notice them?) but you've spun their relationship sooo believably here - both the dynamic (hyungline ;_;) and the progression. mark often gets mischaracterized in fic as this secretly ott person or as this totally silent weirdo but you've struck such a good balance here lmao I'm so like *mouth open in shock* I LIKE YOUR MARK SO MUCH!! HE MAKES SO MUCH SENSE?? your characterization in general, like jb is sooo good. he's also a hard voice to get but you've really nailed him. even the opening scene - taking the split second to make sure mark's okay first before yelling at him LMAO, your on-point humor in general tempered by moments of maturity/clarity - I like that this fic is both about markbum and mark and jb separately, especially jb. his feelings on gotstar are so.. complex... it's so delicious... how can someone be so mature and yet so bullheaded >__< and ahh the markbum is so good - I love the way you lay out the tension and the foundation for their relationship. Their relationship isn't as obvious as Mark and Jackson's, or as deep as Jaebum and Jinyoung's, but it's there, dependable, steady, a port for days of stormy seas. / What he wants to tell Mark is that it's okay for him to open up to Jaebum. They have this shared rock between them called GOTSTAR, weathered by their history together, and no matter what their future holds, that rock will hold firm. this really gets to why I don't notice markbum but it's such a good explanation for them?? HONESTLY I'M IN AWE... I left this fic so fired up like HELL YEAH MARKBUM4LYFE (also I'm fucking crying: "Make some noise when you move!" he barks.) your description of their first meeting and how it sets the tone for the rest of the relationship is so ♥♥
UR PITCH PERFECT SIDE CHARACTERS?? WTF? HOW DID U GET THEM SO WELL? "He looked totally awesome midair though, want to see the pic I got?" Jackson digs out his cell phone. ping pong jackson, bouncing between regret/apology and Getting the Perfect Shot (his folders of mark pictures al;kd;aklamdla), Jinyoung visibly melts, despite his arm shooting backwards to shove away Jackson sneaking towards the take-out. I'M SORRY I'M JR TRASH (the markjin is Cute), bambam's irreverent questions sjdkhgs, yugyeom wishing ill on jr omg lmao, lovely lines like this: As a kid he must have had a label maker and used it to conquer the world, proving the strength of his existence based on how many nooks and crannies he could decorate with his name. wahhh king of the world jackson, this perfect image, "Diss! Wow! You're calling me weird? You want to have a weird contest?" / "What does that mean? You can't possibly think I'm weirder than you?" wait sorry again I'm also jinson trash I guess.. UR GREAT LINES UR GREAT HUMOR!! I don't even have anything insightful to say anymore asklfja i'm sorry i'm just posting lines I like u__u
finally, this perfect ideal ending T__T I love your writing, you capture their individual voices so well but you also get this great, meaty tension IT'S SO REAL omg when jb totally misunderstand's mark's hesitation I wanted to scream but also it's SOOO REAL like this is So Real lmao like the feelings hurt me so bad because it's just like omg nooo this Too Real confrontation and misunderstanding >__< It was only the possibility of losing Mark that made Jaebum realize how deep that desire ran. Miles and miles of uncharted territory, tunneled within him throughout their years together, waiting to be graced by light. By Mark. this beautiful line and then this beautiful gotstar ending, I'm honestly misty-eyed THANK U SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS
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