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Rayne Fic: Reborn - New

Feb 05, 2007 15:45

Title: New
Series: Reborn
Author: nutmeg610
Rating: NC - 17 (oh that's right, your eyes aren't deceiving you! I wrote teh porn. And PWP too!)
Summary: Jayne and River get intimate for the first time.
Notes: (So the author who said she didn't think she'd ever write porn is obviously a liar. :P I would consider this really PWP, so if you aren ( Read more... )

pairing: river/jayne, series: reborn

Comments 35

curi_o February 5 2007, 21:16:57 UTC

This time, I'm commenting on your story and not getting distracted by anything.

So, wow. I'm in awe of the ways you found to avoid using creepifyin' words to describe a very intimate and realistic moment--and one in which neither Jayne nor River lost their tempers!

And you did good. Real good.

fairandbright February 6 2007, 02:35:47 UTC

Thank you muchly! I'm thankful I avoided creepifying words!

fluties_flake February 5 2007, 21:26:18 UTC

O....M....G.... !!!

*thud*

fairandbright February 6 2007, 02:34:58 UTC

*revives you* You ok? Need an ice pack? That was a good thud, right? ;)

TMI ALERT; read with caution! bugchicklv February 5 2007, 21:32:20 UTC

Ok, something I forgot to tell you in the email:

She had no idea how much he would release, but she certainly didn't want to choke to death. It would be such an embarrassing demise.

First, I laughed; then I waxed all nostalgic 'cause I KNOW I had those same thoughts the first time I...well, did that ( ... )

Re: TMI ALERT; read with caution! fairandbright February 6 2007, 02:31:34 UTC

LMAO! Men have no idea the crap we women go through!

Thank you again!

Re: TMI ALERT; read with caution! aikiariyen February 6 2007, 08:02:16 UTC

Lol. I remember all of that from my most recent ex... the one before him was in no way a large man. He was rather... tiny (which of course turned out to be a bad thing, but probably not in the way you think - never had consentual penetrative sexual intercourse with him).

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fairandbright February 6 2007, 02:30:39 UTC

Thank you! Realistic can be nice too (despite cramping hands)!

jynnantonnyx28 February 5 2007, 22:35:24 UTC

Holy crap! *loves you*

I love the apprehension and the realness of this. I love that their first time doing something more than kissing was good but not mind blowing (for River at least). I love how honest she was with him - you can see the trust they have in each other.

*loves you more*

fairandbright February 6 2007, 02:29:07 UTC

YAY! *loves you back majorly* Thank you!