I'm tagging this "To Be an Airplane" because that is the working title for an original story that I have very very very very slowly in the works. I have a very vague storyline overview, but what I'm doing at the moment is writing short stories about different characters... The way I write fanfic for Sherlock. I like writing, and I want to write
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Anywho, constructive crit! I had some of the same initial confusion as eanor. My first impression of Jen led me to believe she was slightly jaded editor wading through a slush pile. (I think this may have clicked on in my brain because you used the phrase "reject pile.") I didn't make the connection that these were her old stories until I got to the part about the scraps in the shoebox. So anyway, I'm not sure you were going for this late reveal.
I also didn't connect at first who the ALL CAPS voices were (I was trying to figure out why her colleagues might be yelling), until the shoebox moment, because that was when the setting snapped into place for me, and I realized Jen is getting ready to have another baby, etc.
Basically, I think those two confusions were the result of you being maybe slightly too ( ... )
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