Back to Yunho. I love how you don't thump him into stereotypical pathetic, needy sub role. I'm always very wary of how D/s can be mistreated in all fandoms due to sheer ignorance or that kink-of-the-week dismissiveness where it's used as a quick way to get someone's clothes off or to justify dub-con.
You show it as the loving and supportive relationship choice it can be and ease both Yunho and the reader into it at the same time so there is no jarring OOC-ness. In fact, it's one of the least jarring D/s I've read in a while considering how hard it is to shoe-horn two not openly D/s in canon characters into such a framework.
It's not something Yunho seems to have thought about pursuing before, but the way it's offered sparks something dormant in him that he needs, and you make it such a plausible build-up between thinking it won't hurt to play along, to wanting to keep pleasing UC because it feels good, to realisation that he doesn't want to always be the one to make the decisions, to knowing that someone wants to look after and cherish him and shoulder the fallout from the burdens of being such a success.
*little side-note to cheer Yunho's inspiration being tantalisingly out of reach - I lolled so hard at the Bahamas/Mai Tai reference, because that's where my whole writing mojo has been in residence for the past eight years (although my inspiration drinks mojitos, but that's not important)
The email conversation about how the grope-Changmin order turned out so fucked-up but still made Yunho feel amazing for following the instruction to the letter was such a good way of explaining it. And the way you describe Yunho's headspace and the sinking down and surfacing depending on the stimulus both external and internal for him should be used as an example in a fic writing textbook because it's not heavy-handed and it's not too subtle. It just is what it is, and that's - like I said before - a rare gift.
You balance such a serious subject with so much humour: Donghae and Henry; Mrs Kang in accounts; the receptionists who always look at Yunho’s crotch unless they’re looking at his chest... and then counter-balance it again with some incredibly sexy ideas and scenes.
My favourite was the webcam - the moment where you have UC telling Yunho to answer the phone and Changmin sounding flustered and Yunho hearing him type while UC is typing instructions was such a brilliant mind-fuck. The audaciousness of it all made the scene even hotter.
To have Yunho coming while saying Changmin’s name, while Changmin was listening in one reality and watching via webcam in another... that’s one seriously kinky implosion of voyeurism and was utterly thrilling. Unspeakably hot and so damn clever (not to mention brave of Changmin, because he’s pushing Yunho’s shame buttons on both sides and that’s tricky to get right).
Finally can I just mention the brilliant inversion of Changmin calling Yunho Sir. That’s a touch that’s way beyond clever. The bit at the end where Changmin is calling Yunho both baby and sir and then Yunho’s last line just brings the whole thing full circle in such a neat and satisfying way.
I kind of want to tell you I’m speechless, but I think my comment betrays me (again). Thank you so much for writing this!
I'm enjoying these challenges even more than I ever imagined. Apart from those times when I go off the rails or allow myself to be distracted by shiny stuff on the kink meme...
I'm so glad you liked Changmin so much in this ♥
LOL you know we were talking about kink_bingo last night - this fic would fulfil ten different squares LMAO I really don't think I'll do it this year. Though I will probably end up getting a card and writing one fic during amnesty, urgh.
The webcam scene is my favourite too, not only for the doubling (tripling?) of the voyeurism, which seems to be emerging as something of a hot button for me this year, but also because your reaction on the first read-through of that scene was just brilliant. Best beta-read response ever LMAO
Anomalocaris sez he could totally take that Rhinopillar. He's so hardcore he scoffs trilobites for breakfast! Happy has no chance. Just as soon as Anomalocaris works out how to breathe outside of a marine environment, that Rhinopillar is dead meat.
You show it as the loving and supportive relationship choice it can be and ease both Yunho and the reader into it at the same time so there is no jarring OOC-ness. In fact, it's one of the least jarring D/s I've read in a while considering how hard it is to shoe-horn two not openly D/s in canon characters into such a framework.
It's not something Yunho seems to have thought about pursuing before, but the way it's offered sparks something dormant in him that he needs, and you make it such a plausible build-up between thinking it won't hurt to play along, to wanting to keep pleasing UC because it feels good, to realisation that he doesn't want to always be the one to make the decisions, to knowing that someone wants to look after and cherish him and shoulder the fallout from the burdens of being such a success.
*little side-note to cheer Yunho's inspiration being tantalisingly out of reach - I lolled so hard at the Bahamas/Mai Tai reference, because that's where my whole writing mojo has been in residence for the past eight years (although my inspiration drinks mojitos, but that's not important)
The email conversation about how the grope-Changmin order turned out so fucked-up but still made Yunho feel amazing for following the instruction to the letter was such a good way of explaining it. And the way you describe Yunho's headspace and the sinking down and surfacing depending on the stimulus both external and internal for him should be used as an example in a fic writing textbook because it's not heavy-handed and it's not too subtle. It just is what it is, and that's - like I said before - a rare gift.
You balance such a serious subject with so much humour: Donghae and Henry; Mrs Kang in accounts; the receptionists who always look at Yunho’s crotch unless they’re looking at his chest... and then counter-balance it again with some incredibly sexy ideas and scenes.
My favourite was the webcam - the moment where you have UC telling Yunho to answer the phone and Changmin sounding flustered and Yunho hearing him type while UC is typing instructions was such a brilliant mind-fuck. The audaciousness of it all made the scene even hotter.
To have Yunho coming while saying Changmin’s name, while Changmin was listening in one reality and watching via webcam in another... that’s one seriously kinky implosion of voyeurism and was utterly thrilling. Unspeakably hot and so damn clever (not to mention brave of Changmin, because he’s pushing Yunho’s shame buttons on both sides and that’s tricky to get right).
Finally can I just mention the brilliant inversion of Changmin calling Yunho Sir. That’s a touch that’s way beyond clever. The bit at the end where Changmin is calling Yunho both baby and sir and then Yunho’s last line just brings the whole thing full circle in such a neat and satisfying way.
I kind of want to tell you I’m speechless, but I think my comment betrays me (again). Thank you so much for writing this!
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I'm enjoying these challenges even more than I ever imagined.
Apart from those times when I go off the rails or allow myself to be distracted by shiny stuff on the kink meme...
I'm so glad you liked Changmin so much in this ♥
LOL you know we were talking about kink_bingo last night - this fic would fulfil ten different squares LMAO I really don't think I'll do it this year. Though I will probably end up getting a card and writing one fic during amnesty, urgh.
The webcam scene is my favourite too, not only for the doubling (tripling?) of the voyeurism, which seems to be emerging as something of a hot button for me this year, but also because your reaction on the first read-through of that scene was just brilliant. Best beta-read response ever LMAO
Anomalocaris sez he could totally take that Rhinopillar. He's so hardcore he scoffs trilobites for breakfast! Happy has no chance. Just as soon as Anomalocaris works out how to breathe outside of a marine environment, that Rhinopillar is dead meat.
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