051 ✩ rhythmic ;; [ code geass ]

[lewdness]

TITLE: Rhythmic
RATING: PG/K+
SUMMARY: Rolo hates everything steady and perfect.
FANDOM: Code Geass.
OTHER: J-just tossing around ideas and toying with my Rolo muse. Dedicated / written for labyrinths for playing such an amazing Rolo. Heeeeere's to hoping I didn't rape his character or Lelouch's too badly, augh.

Thanks to herush  for glancing over this for me at 4:30

Comments

[lavaliere]

;LKAHSD;GKHASDG OMG I LOVE IT. It's so cute and sweet but tainted with that slight hint of how everything is so very wrong. It fits them so well.

And I loooved the writing style. Flow was perfect and I adored the perfect mix of long and short sentences. Nnng, brb loving on this foreverrrr. ♥

[lewdness]

Everything about them is so screwed up, auuuugh. I love it so much. :|

Thank youuuuu. ♥

[lavaliere]

haha, it wouldn't be Geass if they weren't messed up. But that's a big reason why I enjoy the two soooo much. The pseudo-cest is just and added bonusssss ♥

[lewdness]

I keep trying to write porn with them but it just doesn't work because a-augh, Lelouch is so asexual in my head, lmfoashgkg. /dies forever

[glasgowfrown]

I enjoyed this a lot. I think that you're very good at portraying real emotions. (Does that phrase make sense?) You don't just say, "So-and-so felt anxious/lustful/ecstatic," you portray how the characters are feeling through their actions, and I think that's the mark of a good writer. :) I find that I can really get into the head (and heart/emotions) of the characters that you write.

the though never occurring to him.

You made a tiny typo.

And you like constructive criticism, right? (I can't see you getting offended by it, but I hate to be really harsh on people's writing.)

I think that some of the sentences are a little confusing, mostly because they're very long. But, I won't harp on you because it didn't distract from the overall story, and I think that you wrote this late at night, anyway. It was this sentence that mainly got me: "...it takes only a split second to cast his Geass, pushing Lelouch’s suddenly stiff arm up and away, fingers working quickly only this time, he’s not disassembling a bomb or reassembling a gun... It

[lewdness]

D'aw, thank you. ♥ I had fun writing this, so I'm glad it was okay.

Fixed the typo and the sentence, and h-haha, yeah uh, this was written at like 4/5 AM so it was just kind of vomited out and prettied up as much as I could since the idea wouldn't leave my head. 8|||

[glasgowfrown]

Oh, come on, it's more than okay. IT'S AWESOME! :3 (Let's hope that that sparkly text works!)

I know that I sound really harsh in my comment, but it's my job to nitpick people's writing, and I can't stop myself now. ;_; I hope that you know that I enjoyed it. (I'm just here to deflate your ego, Chii~~~ B|)

...I wish that my word vomit were as entertaining and readable as your word vomit.

[lewdness]

Glitter text ftw, man.

And haha, no, don't worry, you didn't sound harsh. I tend to do a lot of run-on sentences and shit so if people catch me raping the English language, s'all good if they tell me. |D

FFFFFFF, shush.

[jjblue1]

I think this is truly beautiful. The boys are prfect and Rolo's adorable! Great work!

[lewdness]

♥ Thank you so much...!

[robotlove]

Mmmmm, I love a well-written Rolo fic. It flows well. I like the links you make between the watch and the rain and oh GOODNESS FIVE WATCHES ALREADY? POOR LULU AHAHHA.

What's best is the quiet, cosy image of them just huddling together enjoying the weather. I could totally see Rolo's contented face. You reminded me of how much I love the rain myself.

Thanks for this, and memming :D

PS: The jacket. OH GOODNESS it was my favorite KaLulu moment from R2 and now you made Lelouch do that for ROLO TOO *faints from bliss*

[lewdness]

♥ Thank you so much!

Hahaha, I'm so glad you liked it~ I enjoyed writing this, so I hope to dabble with them more.