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"EVERYONE BUT ME" (Edited)

Dec 28, 2008 21:29

TITLE: "EVERYONE BUT ME"
AUTHOR: doppelgangerqaf
BETAED BY: buzziecat (Thank you for the suggestions on this one!!!!)
RATING: R; other warning--angst.
WORD COUNT: 292 words.
A/N: Ahm, this is not my first original fic. I've written a lot in my native tongue and also, I've written a short one which I've posted in my original fiction comm panitik_ni_dops; but still I'm nervous. This is ( Read more... )

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7qt December 30 2008, 08:37:08 UTC

Read this one too!! - The last line- "...Everybody but me ..." Really leaves tremendous scope for lots more !!-Carry on please will ya'- An ' I've alwayz loved the name "AUBERY" -It is such a lovely name - Holds a lot of poignancy -I dunno why - Maybe 'coz I,ve always loved the song by the, "BREAD" called - " AUBERY" -It goes llike this -Maybe you have heard it - "An' Aubey was her name ...But not so very odinary girl ,a name ..But who's to blame ..For a love that wouldn't bloom...For a heart that never played in tune ...Like a lovely melody that ev'ry one can sing...take away the words that ryme ..It doesn't mean a thing....An' Aub'ry was her name ...We tripped an' danced 2gether to the moon ...But where was June ...Oh-It never came around...If it did It never made a sound....Maybe I was absent or was listenin' 2 fast-...Catchin' all the words but then the meaning goin' past....God I miss the girl ...an' I'd go thousand times aroun' the world ...Just to be ...Closer to her ...Than to meeeee......" An' It carries on - The song IS really good -An' like I said I really love the name -So maybe you can rotate your fic around that same kind of intensity -An' a bit of poignancy an' mystery -But then that's Just a thought -I'm sure what ever U write will be swell- You've done wonderful here already - Waiting for more -

doppelgangerqaf January 1 2009, 20:48:54 UTC

Oh, I love that song!!!! That's my favorite BREAD song. Might sound silly but err I do get teary-eyed whenever I hear the song... I am working on continuing this. But it is actually a spin off something I'm working on... Ahm, something more serious and hopefully will work out haha And where have you been? I think I got a PM and email from you right? I have to check. I haven't checked all my emails. I'm kind of lie-lowing... The holidays got me so tired. But tomorrow, I'm "back to work"-- on here, LJ, I mean hehe. I have to post holiday fics for qaf_translated. Man that will take ALL DAY.... Can't wait to start!

How was your NEW YEAR'S????

:O) HUGS!
*Dops

7qt January 3 2009, 07:15:40 UTC

No U don't sound silly at all !!-I,myself almost fall apart listening to it f-But then most of'BREAD'S' songs are like that-My "New Year's'- was a blast-I'm still a little off grid !-But I'll come around-These days it's so fuckin' cold-It's hard to really move your butt !!-But I'm getting there-Good to hear you're working on your writing-So am I-Fics an' Lyrics-I dunno whether I'll ever get a break in this line -But...I do it anyway-keeps me sane an' coz It's just somethin' that comes naturally to me -God knows!!-An' Hey!! -When are we goin' to get to read your reincarnation one !!-I'm really dyin' to read that-Hope soon !!- I'm really lookin' forward to that one-Don't make the wait too long??!! -Talk to me -good to hear from u -Take care-Lotsa HUGGS !!-

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