"Saga" - Chapter 12, Part 2

[gilli_ann]

Chapter 12, part 2

For more on content, disclaimers and A/Ns, see the chapter’s part 1.

Comments

[camillar]

Slight angst? Well if this is your idea of slight angst then I'm really scared as to what major angst would be ;) It was a sad, sad chapter. I didn't want their mountain time to have to end. I knew it was going to eventually, but still :( I am excited to see you back, I hope that means RL is somewhat calmer for you. And I'm very excited to see where this is all going. Thanks for the update!
Camilla

[gilli_ann]

I thought "major angst" would be as serious as main character death and the like - not that I'm saying any such will occur! :-O
Thank you for the welcome back! RL is still hectic, but at least I'm home to sneak some time inbetween at my comuter. And thank you so much for continuing to read!

[gilli_ann]

I think you've got Ketil pegged. He's striving too hard to show himself in compliance with every social norm and the time's "macho" ideals - I guess his childhood did as little as Einnis's in nurtuing true self-confidence and independent thinking, though he's found other ways of "dealing" with it than his brother. Not that he becomes any more likable for all that.

I'm glad you like the tale still, thank you for commenting.

[julietteh]

I've been following your great story--thank you! I thought it went as well as could be expected--"Jack" live and he's still closely tied to the family

[gilli_ann]

Thank you, very useful concrit! I'm especially glad that you find that the lack of inner monologues and thoughts enhances the story. I rather think that's quite liberating myself - leaves their actions more open to interpretation and nuance. And more challenging to write, when there's no possibility of having the characters "explain" to the readers what's going on with them.

I actually agree about the "Sleeping on your feet" line being too canon for its own good, it sticks out a little like a sore thumb. Maybe I'll go back and remove it, the fic won't lose anything if it goes.

Horrible

[joetheone]

Keitel wanting to kill Eoin and well the whole ordeal is awful and I fear for his safety and somehow Ennis just needs to up and leave this entire country and move away with his man and get it over with, because nothing good is going to come of the future that is laid out for him. I know he has honor and integrity but he must do this or lose what he has gained over this wonderful winter. Joe

Re: Horrible

[gilli_ann]

Yes, Einnis is in a very bad place, torn between his duty and obligation to the clan (which was a Very Big Deal in those days), his formal oath made to Arna and her father (also a Big Deal), his own deep sense of shame at having behaved in a way that he considers "womanish" in deeds as well as emotions (a *big* no-no of the times), his worry for Eoin's safety and his unspoken love for him. Four of those five concerns tell him to part ways with Eoin.... love stands alone on the other side.
Thank you very much for reading and commenting, Joe!

Re: Horrible

[freetraveller15]

.... love stands alone on the other side
Oh my... This is a painful summing up of all the dilemmas Einnis is facing right now. Indeed, personal and family/clan honour was a really big deal at the time, and I don't see Einnis being able to extricate himself easily from all his obligations.

[bentgyro]

Oh, this does not bode well for our boys, but at least Ennis was able to keep Eoin with him, in spite of his brother. a well written but sad chapter.
Thank you!
HT

[gilli_ann]

Thank you for reading, and for you kind comment. :-)