PRESENTING: THE BEST OC FIC IN THE WORLD PART THREE!
Hello guys I'M BACK!
Anyway, to day we have a double Sue! TWO OCs for you to laugh at. Both from the same author on nick.com.
Poor kids, they have no idea that thier stuff is crap.
Title- Sari: The Last Bender
DumbassAuthor: Waterh299
Replies: A whopping total of about 23 positive responses (not including posts from author).
So far: Not a canon charachter in sight. Bad discriptions, horrible sue that is the Avatar, an AU taking place in modern times.
Things wrong with this story: Look up.
Sample of story, full chapter 1:
Part 1-
Sari was running with all her might,she needed to get to school on time. Tyra waved to her from the entrance.
"Come on or we'll be late!" Tyra called.
"I'm coming,do I look like a airbender to you?"Sari said with a laugh.
There hadn't been a bender in two hundred ever since the old race died off. Sari blasted throught the doors with Tyra at her heels.
"Did you call Jake?" Tyra asked.
Sari only blushed, "Oh come on! If you want your guy, you have to be agressive."
Sari retorted, "And this coming from a Water Tribe girl?"
Tyra shrugged and they laughed. This would have been a normal day at Ying Academy, too bad it wasn't.
Sari slid into class a minute before the bell rang and sat down. The teacher turned to see who just arrived.
"Well Miss Sari,its good to see you on time."Mr.Sen said in his scrathy voice.
"I wish it was the same here."Tyra whispered, both girls giggled.
Mr.Sen taught World History and they were going over the Hundred Year War.
TBC
part 2
At lunch that day Tyra and Sari sat with their friends April and Davy.
"I hate history."Sari complained.
Davy looked up from his lunch,"Well if you paid attention in class-"
The others giggled and Sari made a face.
"Hey."someone said.
Sari turned slowly to see her crush Jake.
She blushed,"Hi Jake."
Her friends began to laugh and Sari shot them a glare.She did some light conversation and Jake walked off.Sari sighed hevilly.
"Jake."her friends giggled.
"When are you asking him out?"April asked.
"Shut up!"Sari snapped.
She stomped her foot on the ground and an aftershock went through the entire area.Everyone stared in Sari's direction and she blushed deep red.
"Oh my gosh!"April exclaimed after school,"You bended!"
"Says who?"Sari asked,knowing the answer.
"Says everyone!"Davy said.
Sari didn't say another word and ran for her house,but a hole opened under her and she fell down a tube screaming.She landed ona hard chair and she rubbed her butt.
"Where the heck am I?"
First response by AVATECH1:
Subject- This is really good.
I just wanted to tell you that the idea is really original (Gigi:PSSSSSSSSSH YEAH RIGHT!) and I like it. I don't thiunk anyone has done something like this before.(HAHAHAHA!) Good job!
AVATECH1, author of The Forge, which should be posted some time soon! (I CAN'T WAIT TO KILL IT!)
http://www.nick.com/blab/messageboards/viewthread.jhtml?bID=105146&tID=2458939&mID=11701818
NOW SPEAK YOUR MIND ABOUT THIS CRAP!
This entry is dedicated to Sakuradrops, who left DH because her mother died in a car crash on Christmas Eve. Your mother is safe in Jesus' arms Sakura, and we give our sorrows to you. May she watch over you and your family. God Bless.
Anyway, to day we have a double Sue! TWO OCs for you to laugh at. Both from the same author on nick.com.
Poor kids, they have no idea that thier stuff is crap.
Title- Sari: The Last Bender
DumbassAuthor: Waterh299
Replies: A whopping total of about 23 positive responses (not including posts from author).
So far: Not a canon charachter in sight. Bad discriptions, horrible sue that is the Avatar, an AU taking place in modern times.
Things wrong with this story: Look up.
Sample of story, full chapter 1:
Part 1-
Sari was running with all her might,she needed to get to school on time. Tyra waved to her from the entrance.
"Come on or we'll be late!" Tyra called.
"I'm coming,do I look like a airbender to you?"Sari said with a laugh.
There hadn't been a bender in two hundred ever since the old race died off. Sari blasted throught the doors with Tyra at her heels.
"Did you call Jake?" Tyra asked.
Sari only blushed, "Oh come on! If you want your guy, you have to be agressive."
Sari retorted, "And this coming from a Water Tribe girl?"
Tyra shrugged and they laughed. This would have been a normal day at Ying Academy, too bad it wasn't.
Sari slid into class a minute before the bell rang and sat down. The teacher turned to see who just arrived.
"Well Miss Sari,its good to see you on time."Mr.Sen said in his scrathy voice.
"I wish it was the same here."Tyra whispered, both girls giggled.
Mr.Sen taught World History and they were going over the Hundred Year War.
TBC
part 2
At lunch that day Tyra and Sari sat with their friends April and Davy.
"I hate history."Sari complained.
Davy looked up from his lunch,"Well if you paid attention in class-"
The others giggled and Sari made a face.
"Hey."someone said.
Sari turned slowly to see her crush Jake.
She blushed,"Hi Jake."
Her friends began to laugh and Sari shot them a glare.She did some light conversation and Jake walked off.Sari sighed hevilly.
"Jake."her friends giggled.
"When are you asking him out?"April asked.
"Shut up!"Sari snapped.
She stomped her foot on the ground and an aftershock went through the entire area.Everyone stared in Sari's direction and she blushed deep red.
"Oh my gosh!"April exclaimed after school,"You bended!"
"Says who?"Sari asked,knowing the answer.
"Says everyone!"Davy said.
Sari didn't say another word and ran for her house,but a hole opened under her and she fell down a tube screaming.She landed ona hard chair and she rubbed her butt.
"Where the heck am I?"
First response by AVATECH1:
Subject- This is really good.
I just wanted to tell you that the idea is really original (Gigi:PSSSSSSSSSH YEAH RIGHT!) and I like it. I don't thiunk anyone has done something like this before.(HAHAHAHA!) Good job!
AVATECH1, author of The Forge, which should be posted some time soon! (I CAN'T WAIT TO KILL IT!)
http://www.nick.com/blab/messageboards/viewthread.jhtml?bID=105146&tID=2458939&mID=11701818
NOW SPEAK YOUR MIND ABOUT THIS CRAP!
This entry is dedicated to Sakuradrops, who left DH because her mother died in a car crash on Christmas Eve. Your mother is safe in Jesus' arms Sakura, and we give our sorrows to you. May she watch over you and your family. God Bless.