BS: P/P: PG: Deprivation

[gibson_fic]

Title: Deprivation
Author: Gibson_fic
Fandom: Bandslash, Fall Out Boy
Characters/Pairing: Pete/Patrick
Rating: PG for language
Disclaimer: This is a fictional story about characters based, in part, on the images and histories of real people. If that bothers you and/or you are one of those people, you probably don't want to read this. No harm is

Comments

[mrsquizzical]

oh my heart.

i love this.

for all the issues you have with your writing or whatever i think your style is absolutely perfect for patrick's voice. the circular way that he focuses closer and closer to the essence of something, the way he refers outside of and then inside of himself.

and now they're all cuddly and falling asleep together. ugh so comfortable and 'home'. lovely.

[gibson_fic]

Thank you. :) I'm really glad that you liked this. It was the one of the two that I liked the least, but I think it's growing on me. ;)

[barmy_bunk]

that. was adorable. i. love. pete.

i do have a question, though. how exactly are web site interviews usually conducted? because i kept picturing patrick and web site guy on like, webcams, or something, and so when pete called during the interview, i was like, uh-oh, and THEN WHEN HE SHOWED UP? i was like, THIS CAN ONLY END BADLY. so. can you, um, explain it to me?

[gibson_fic]

:) I wondered if that was going to be confusing. Pretty much, there's a time-lag in the middle there, Patrick steers the conversation away and then sort of goes on about his day, but he's just thinking about how tired he is and how far Pete is and how this is worth, really it is, but he just wants Pete and a pillow and it's too much to ask for that they can do that?

In my head the first part is a real interview, Patrick sitting across the table from some guy, but the bit later is that night in the hotel, Patrick working on the Cobra's stuff when Pete calls. So, no it's not during the interview. :D

I've tweaked it a little and given it a proper, visual break. See if that works for you better?

Thanks, I'm glad you liked Pete. :D

[barmy_bunk]

much better! *beams*

and... what's not to like?

[redsnake05]

I think you did a good job of capturing the circular, exhausted and exhausting reasoning of someone so tired and bone-weary. That was awesome.

[gibson_fic]

Haha, that's because all my reasoning is circular and exhausted. LOL. :) Thank you m'dear. I know they're not your pairing, I appreciate you checking it out. :D

[citrus_vanille]

So sweet! I have no idea why that kind of dependency is appealing, but it really, really is. I also really like this 'verse, so extra brownie points! :)

(My brain is currently locked into beta mode after a 70-page fic, so I'm going to be that annoying person who says 'hey, you've got a couple typos' at I know your day isn’t’ going according (extra apostrophe), Pete grinned again and went other bathroom (other -> into the) and Dud could take the fastest showers (Dud -> Dude).)

[gibson_fic]

Thanks! I really appreciate the error-spotting because I do tend to miss things like that, forever. I took care of some comma situation too. :)

That sort of dependency can be debilitating and it's exhausting there are lots of things about it that change how you function, but it's not necessarily a bad thing--depending on the people involved. I don't know, a lot of my OTPs have this aspect to them and I'm aware of how damaging it can be, but it's also so wonderful, with the right people.

Thanks again :D

[asimplechord]

This timestamp makes me smile ridiculously wide. :)

[gibson_fic]

Thank you, glad it could bring you a smile.

:D