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[kaimaler]

Aloha, Kaimaler here! (Finally) I'm a lurker, I admit, but I am contributing to the communitiy so I don't feel like a leech anymore. :D

So yeah, this is my first completed Fallout fic and my second published romance genre, so I'm not to sure about this. Granted, I have been writing for about three years now, but this one-shot was meant to be a scrap

Comments

[antoj]

since when does charon call anyone "mistress"

[antoj]

oh i guess since he's bonin ur sue

buh dum psh.

i'm such a funny guy.

[vioven]

Seriously, he even stressed that he belongs to no one and refers to the LW as an employer. The 'mistress' nickname is a strange fandom born phenomena.

Not to mention if they're going to go down that route at least use 'Master'. 'Mistress' will always equal 'the other women' to me. :P

[antoj]

the mistress thing pisses me off so bad. i want to find the person that started it and punch them in the throat. it makes charon 1000000000000000000000%%%%%% OOC and no one seems to give a fuck cuz they think it makes him ~*~*~*KAWAIIDESU*~*~*~

lskfdkfksdfkdslfksd.

[cyprith]

You have Sue'd where no Sues have gone before, my dear.

[thekayla]

Your LW is a Sue and your Charon is grossly OOC. You need to reconsider how you've characterized them both.

[antoj]

goddamn i'm actually trying to read this fic now and i have to say....your FLW is such a sue it's making me cringe.

i mean really.

there is nothing about her that isn't a sue.

[antoj]

i mean really? you spend like 2 paragraphs saying how she's da preetiest of dem allz and how all the men just wanna touch her and .....what the hell lmao.

also you even fail at writing a dog character.

[antoj]

also desmond would not give a fuck about her sueventures.

just sayin.

[antoj]

one more for now while i'm thinking about it. it's cool you played fallout 3 but to go as far as to summarize the entire game in the form of forced exposition is just sad.

[bloodyheartless]

And I was so excited to see more ghoul!fic.....D=