Oh, this is good! I love the shifting perspectives and the clever way you've woven the episodes into the stories, and Ray and Fraser's internal voices are spot on. brilliant, really original and fresh. A good way to start a Monday *g*
I absolutely adore this, especially your graceful use of canon. It's a lovely, powerful, spare story, and your use of parentheses completely works for me.
If you have the time or inclination to explore it, I'd love hearing your thoughts about/intentions with the Last Night "kiss" line. I'm so literal that I'm having a hard time fitting it in with the rest of the story, but I suspect I'm missing something good.
the text is spare because all the overblown analysis gets stuck in my commentsomphale23September 25 2006, 18:25:15 UTC
I do have a weakness for parenthetical asides--I think Ray's brain keeps arbitrarily shifting topics on him, and Fraser's trying to talk himself out of what he really wants, so they have all these little left brain-right brain arguments when I write. Plus, I'm addicted to adjectives
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Re: the text is spare because all the overblown analysis gets stuck in my commentsslidellraSeptember 25 2006, 19:43:38 UTC
Oh, thank you. Enjoyed your analysis, and rereading the fic after was a richer experience.
That's a sneaky little point you have about "an outsider looking in and identifying what he sees as love." Made me think more on Ray's assertion that Fraser loves him. I like the possibility for uncertainty I found in that statement on rereading, the implication that love is an act of faith and trust, rather than a provable, static fact.
That's truly wonderful with the changing perspectives and using canon and ... just everything!
Because now Ray wants, more than anything, to kiss Fraser without the threat of anyone’s impending demise. He wants to talk about air without wondering what he’s really giving away. He wants to be able to hold hands without a car chase. He wants to run to Fraser for something more than safe harbor.
Thank you! Ray wants an awful lot, and he wants all of it more than everything he's got--the list kept getting longer and longer, until I finally had to walk away from it. I was nervous about referencing canon so much, and I'm glad it worked for you!
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(Also, I love your icon. It makes me giggle.)
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I put that prompt in and I have to say I'm in love with the way you handled it. :)
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If you have the time or inclination to explore it, I'd love hearing your thoughts about/intentions with the Last Night "kiss" line. I'm so literal that I'm having a hard time fitting it in with the rest of the story, but I suspect I'm missing something good.
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That's a sneaky little point you have about "an outsider looking in and identifying what he sees as love." Made me think more on Ray's assertion that Fraser loves him. I like the possibility for uncertainty I found in that statement on rereading, the implication that love is an act of faith and trust, rather than a provable, static fact.
Yay dvd commentary!
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Because now Ray wants, more than anything, to kiss Fraser without the threat of anyone’s impending demise. He wants to talk about air without wondering what he’s really giving away. He wants to be able to hold hands without a car chase. He wants to run to Fraser for something more than safe harbor.
YEAH!
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