Oh, gena, you may not like it, but this was gorgeous, start to finish. The day they had, the connection between them, everything. I started crying not even a third of the way through, but I love it.
*hands over hanky* It's pretty smoopy, isn't it? I don't know why it came out like that, I was trying to be all deep and not sappy and then I got a little weepy and it just went splat on the screen.
Oh, I don't think it's smoopy, at least not in a BAD smoopy way. It's smoop of the highest quality. *grins*
You captured the depth of their friendship so well, and it was so awesome how House never let on that it was also HIS last day--but the realization that what they did was ALSO House's idea of a perfect day was just...Oh. And I'm all teary again. :)
Gena--it's lovely. I remember the first part and liked the idea, and now you've fleshed it out, it works. The idea of Wilson asking for one more day, then finding out at the end that House wanted the same thing--they spent one last, good day together alive, and were together when they died, and that was the important thing.
Very OOC, I know but I couldn't help it. Then ending was the hard part - I kept writing Wilson as dying w/o House and knew that couldn't be the way. Those two are meant to be together in one way or another.
Truer words never spoken. This was beautiful. I loved, loved, loved Wilson and House on the boat, and your characterization of House's ADD combined with his brilliance making him so good at video games was perfect.
And, basically, I started bawling the second Death said, "He asked for one more day." It's heartbreaking and gorgeous.
That's really how I see Wilson, he gets something from loving House that he needs so it must be its own reward. Poor House , he never would have had such great video games as a child as they have now (bet he spent hours playing Pong) but I know there has to be a reason he's so good at them! Well, so far no one has said it was completely too sappy too read so I guess it's not as bad as I was thinking. I read my own fic after I write it and cringe a lot of times. Do you ever dislike anything you've written? Do you write professionally? (am I being nosy?)
Sometimes I'll look back at something and think, "Ouch, I could have done that better." But I rarely want to pitch out the whole thing. There's always something there worth keeping.
I don't think it's sappy at all. You have a richness to your style that's perfectly suited to the depth of commitment Wilson and House have to each other. They both, I think, feel things very keenly, but they don't let it show, and so this interior view is just right for letting the reader into their heads.
I used to write professionally, but it was news writing, which is a whole 'nother beast and it left me too burned out to write any fiction. (This is why one rarely sees good novels done by journalists.) For my job now, I do a little writing, just enough to be enjoyable.
That was such a powerful piece of writing! Such a clever idea, and so well executed. When Death told Wilson that House had also asked for one last day blood actually shot up to my head and pounded behind my eyes, and I think my heart-rate went up to beat Wilson's as he dashed over to House's apartment!
Great, great stuff :) Thanks so much for writing it!
Yeah!!! I sent your blood pressure up! I really don't know where this came from and I didn't know where it was going, only that House and Wilson had to go together.
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You captured the depth of their friendship so well, and it was so awesome how House never let on that it was also HIS last day--but the realization that what they did was ALSO House's idea of a perfect day was just...Oh. And I'm all teary again. :)
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Truer words never spoken. This was beautiful. I loved, loved, loved Wilson and House on the boat, and your characterization of House's ADD combined with his brilliance making him so good at video games was perfect.
And, basically, I started bawling the second Death said, "He asked for one more day." It's heartbreaking and gorgeous.
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I don't think it's sappy at all. You have a richness to your style that's perfectly suited to the depth of commitment Wilson and House have to each other. They both, I think, feel things very keenly, but they don't let it show, and so this interior view is just right for letting the reader into their heads.
I used to write professionally, but it was news writing, which is a whole 'nother beast and it left me too burned out to write any fiction. (This is why one rarely sees good novels done by journalists.) For my job now, I do a little writing, just enough to be enjoyable.
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That was such a powerful piece of writing! Such a clever idea, and so well executed. When Death told Wilson that House had also asked for one last day blood actually shot up to my head and pounded behind my eyes, and I think my heart-rate went up to beat Wilson's as he dashed over to House's apartment!
Great, great stuff :) Thanks so much for writing it!
::memmed::
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