Dark of the Moon (27/36)
A little more Dark of the Moon, which hereswith was kind enough to edit for me earlier today. It could conceivably be counted toward the drabble theme of the week at Black Pearl Tales...
( Part 27, in which our heroine endures a terribly tittilating TRIAL )
( Part 27, in which our heroine endures a terribly tittilating TRIAL )
Lots of beautiful things to love in this chapter. The picture of the Black Pearl lit with gold. Jack’s dreams for her when she’s his that are so poignant because of the terrible future that awaits this man and this ship.
Too cold there, both in the physical and the metaphorical sense.
Ha! That would be Jack’s opinion.
She flushed, but returned his regard, steadily. “I certainly won’t forget you.”
He nodded. “Good enough. That’s ever an object with me, that not forgetting.” And yet he sounded a little wistful as he said this.
This is another poignant moment. Letty’s good save-never tell the truth when you can prevaricate! And Jack’s devotion to being memorable combined with the loneliness of a life that means he will only be memorable.
She would not tell him that, in spite of everything - everything consisting (mostly) of his sudden and apparently satisfying reunion with the Señora Esmarelda del Amador - she would not only remember him, but would long for him in a way to which no female with the smallest pretension to honor or gentility could admit.
Ah! The truth is out. She’s a goner indeed, as was inevitable. Love her definition of “everything.”
And that description of Jack is definitely a mouth-watering one--nothing short of breathtaking-as you say. But really the things that get me are those “lovable” ones: the innumerable, fascinating expressions that flitted ‘cross that face, his voice, rough and melodious all at once; his movements, fey and graceful and skilled, even in drunken reverie. His courage. His laughter. His kindness.
Mmmmmm. *loves Jack* Thank you for that picture to contemplate!
Although it had not been kind of him to go with the Señora. She was still surprised he had done it.
Alas that it was kind. No false advertising for Jack.
The incident had set a wall between them. Jack had not apologized for it, and she knew he would not.
Good fences make good neighbours, eh?
Oh, it was well she would soon be gone, for she wanted him, in every way, even some that she could barely allow herself to imagine. And she wanted him to have his heart’s desire - whatever in the world that might be.
Oh the tension! And that last line-she could really love him, if she’s added his heart’s desires to her own. How sad and lovely. Wonderful writing, my dear!
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Thank you so much for the detailed feedback. I am very happy that this story has found a niche with readers who need a little break from all the mayhem. I like romances, both to read and write, because one knows that ultimately things will turn out OK. Of course this one is bittersweet, but there will still be a satisfying warm fuzzy ending, with a couple of surprises (I hope).
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