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geekmama

'Unaware' Drabble

Mar 22, 2006 15:38

A double drabble (200 words) in reply to the current drabble challenge at Black Pearl Sails...

( Theme: 'Unaware' )

potcfic, elizabeth, drabble, challenge

Comments 13

camille_moineau March 23 2006, 03:44:40 UTC

Great little one-shot you have there. I've been meaning to do an Estrella-Elizabeth one myself.

geekmama March 23 2006, 04:32:17 UTC

Thanks so much! I did a Christmas story per __shy__'s request featuring Estrella/Jack, with a little bit of Elizabeth & Will. Estrella's kind of fun to write.

Was snooping in your journal and saw that, besides PotC, you like 'Daria'! *bounces* Mind if I friend you?

camille_moineau March 26 2006, 01:57:34 UTC

Thanks so much! I did a Christmas story per __shy__'s request featuring Estrella/Jack, with a little bit of Elizabeth & Will. Estrella's kind of fun to write.

I think I saw that one at FFN!:) I'll read it and leave a review....

Was snooping in your journal and saw that, besides PotC, you like 'Daria'! *bounces* Mind if I friend you?

Go ahead! :) I'm putting you on my Friends list, too.

felaine March 23 2006, 04:39:22 UTC

Good assessment of Elizabeth and the men in her life; and how unaware of the effect she has she is.
Well-written, as always.
Am also enjoying the perils-of-Pauline storyline for Jack and his heroine.
You keep to all the characters faithfully, and ones you add like the captain, blend so well.
Felaine

geekmama March 23 2006, 14:54:07 UTC

Thanks so much Felaine. I'm glad to know you enjoyed this, and the latest bit of Dark of the Moon, and very happy you feel everyone's in character.

(Oooh, icon!!! I live in hope that you will favor us with another journal entry one of these days!) (Or anything else you care to write... ;) )

the_dala March 23 2006, 08:49:00 UTC

Man, Estrella's got that girl pegged.

geekmama March 23 2006, 14:55:39 UTC

Well, she's around her enough. ;)

Thanks for reading and commenting!

shyaway March 23 2006, 15:38:39 UTC

Ooh, more Estrella fic! Yay! I like the last line in particular. :-)

discretely

um, is that a typo? 'Discrete' means 'separate', at least in UK usage...

I've just about caught up with Dark of the Moon, all but the latest instalment. Great work, so funny and high-spirited. :-)

geekmama March 23 2006, 16:25:27 UTC

It was a typo -- or actually a spelling error. Fixed now. Thanks for the heads up.

Yes, poor Norrie. The last line expresses the heart of the matter: she's quite unaware of Norrington's regard, since she's just coming out of girlhood and realising what she is, and probably still considers him old (as she must have done at twelve when they first met). Glad you enjoyed a little more of Estrella's pov!

And thanks for reading Dark of the Moon, too, and letting me know you like it. There'll more mayhem on the way this weekend. ;)

hereswith March 23 2006, 19:31:00 UTC

It's always interesting to see the characters from Estrella's perspective and this is lovely, and a little sad. she found it in her to pity Captain Norrington a great deal more *sigh* But he's older, as you mentioned above, and I imagine Elizabeth finds him rather boring. Poor James, he doesn't stand much of a chance...

geekmama March 24 2006, 02:30:16 UTC

I don't think they understand one another in the least at this point, and very little more by the time of the movie. That's why it's fun to write Elizabeth/James when they're older and know and appreciate each other for what they are, not what they imagine each other to be.

I'm glad you thought it lovely. I should have had you edit it -- there was a misspelling (discretely/discreetly) and I made James a lieutenant and he would've been a captain by that time, as honorat pointed out. Made the corrections here, but it's still wrong at BP Sails, of course. Bah.