I like how you made Nathan's death, grieving about it, about both the boys, not just...well, Sylar or Peter alone.
I love the image of Peter's face pressed to Sylar's neck. Because, yeah, it is intimate, but (not to be gross) it reminds me of Peter hugging Nathan. Milo and/or Peter chooses to slouch down or tilt his chin down a bit and his face always ends up in Adrian/Nathan's shoulder or neck.
"Repress and release emotion" -- that's a great descriptor of grief. You wanna let it out, but you don't for whatever reason. That right there set up the tone for me in that I can hear that kind of...sobbing noise, if you will, that goes along with the descriptor.
Oh no. Then that thought that Peter's support and semi-Nathan replacement might not be around "when/if they get out"...oh my poor Peter darling.
Isn't that so horribly true, though, that comforting someone, crying, sobbing and stuffed up, pressed all up against you would turn you on, just a little bit? I think its the vulnerability and its not just Sylar.
I adored how this: "Peter kissed his neck, because Peter was an idiot, because it was easier and more desirable to feel passion than grief, and because he wanted to be soothed even more actively, to be loved and cherished and made to feel not-alone in the world."
Offset this: "He wanted to be thrown down and fucked hard. He wanted to be punched and hurt. He wanted something to be happening that would distract him from the yawning pit of grief he'd never finished processing." I think you call it bait-and-switch? There's something you just called it in one of the things you beta'd for me. Two sides of the same coin of grief.
I like the moment where Peter has that "wait, what am I doing again?" moment and Sylar is a fish out of water in What-To-Do Land. That's normal, too. Like, really, what are you gonna do, you know?
Throughout this whole section, I feel so much...yes, pity, but strangely empathy, sympathy. This is a guy who's helped so many other people and he gets left in the dirt by the family that loves him and that he loves (despite their betrayals) and he has no one but the guy who killed his brother and he can't complete his mission and get out and what's worst is he doesn't know how to deal with it any better than anyone else. This section was probably one of the most...accurate emotional human things you've ever written - its amazing, gets me every time.
"The last few weeks had been so good, a couple months now of surprising, near-honeymoon-quality bliss with Sylar" -- Then you give us this, that peek into Peter's world and I the reader am left so happy that Peter has something good (because it really isn't all about Sylar).
I love how...stupid Peter is. He thinks one big cry, one suicidal attempt at heroism and another brainless act of heroism constitutes....healing and getting over his brother. I just wanna tap his shoulder and say, "Peter, it doesn't work that way. You're gonna cry lots."
Oh wow, I'm so glad that Peter-as-an-okay-guy got through. He's an ass in a lot of what I write and occasionally insufferable, but I meant for him to be very human in this chapter. So glad that came through right!
Yeah, that's something of a bait and switch - set the reader up for warm fuzzies and then tell how Peter really wants a good, hard fucking. :)
This section was probably one of the most...accurate emotional human things you've ever written - its amazing, gets me every time. Thank you so much! That's a really intense compliment!
I love how...stupid Peter is. He thinks one big cry, one suicidal attempt at heroism and another brainless act of heroism constitutes....healing and getting over his brother. I just wanna tap his shoulder and say, "Peter, it doesn't work that way. You're gonna cry lots." Yeah. In canon, he gets away with this seamlessly and I just can't swallow it, as I think you know. He's not that strong. No one is. And so I recast it as him thinking he's that strong, and going around in a cloud of denial - thinking 'Oh, I cried about it once and had my little fly around the stars thinking of him, so I'm totally over it now.' So, yes, he's stupid about his own feelings. I like him better that way.
I love the image of Peter's face pressed to Sylar's neck. Because, yeah, it is intimate, but (not to be gross) it reminds me of Peter hugging Nathan. Milo and/or Peter chooses to slouch down or tilt his chin down a bit and his face always ends up in Adrian/Nathan's shoulder or neck.
"Repress and release emotion" -- that's a great descriptor of grief. You wanna let it out, but you don't for whatever reason. That right there set up the tone for me in that I can hear that kind of...sobbing noise, if you will, that goes along with the descriptor.
Oh no. Then that thought that Peter's support and semi-Nathan replacement might not be around "when/if they get out"...oh my poor Peter darling.
Isn't that so horribly true, though, that comforting someone, crying, sobbing and stuffed up, pressed all up against you would turn you on, just a little bit? I think its the vulnerability and its not just Sylar.
I adored how this: "Peter kissed his neck, because Peter was an idiot, because it was easier and more desirable to feel passion than grief, and because he wanted to be soothed even more actively, to be loved and cherished and made to feel not-alone in the world."
Offset this: "He wanted to be thrown down and fucked hard. He wanted to be punched and hurt. He wanted something to be happening that would distract him from the yawning pit of grief he'd never finished processing." I think you call it bait-and-switch? There's something you just called it in one of the things you beta'd for me. Two sides of the same coin of grief.
I like the moment where Peter has that "wait, what am I doing again?" moment and Sylar is a fish out of water in What-To-Do Land. That's normal, too. Like, really, what are you gonna do, you know?
Throughout this whole section, I feel so much...yes, pity, but strangely empathy, sympathy. This is a guy who's helped so many other people and he gets left in the dirt by the family that loves him and that he loves (despite their betrayals) and he has no one but the guy who killed his brother and he can't complete his mission and get out and what's worst is he doesn't know how to deal with it any better than anyone else. This section was probably one of the most...accurate emotional human things you've ever written - its amazing, gets me every time.
"The last few weeks had been so good, a couple months now of surprising, near-honeymoon-quality bliss with Sylar" -- Then you give us this, that peek into Peter's world and I the reader am left so happy that Peter has something good (because it really isn't all about Sylar).
I love how...stupid Peter is. He thinks one big cry, one suicidal attempt at heroism and another brainless act of heroism constitutes....healing and getting over his brother. I just wanna tap his shoulder and say, "Peter, it doesn't work that way. You're gonna cry lots."
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Yeah, that's something of a bait and switch - set the reader up for warm fuzzies and then tell how Peter really wants a good, hard fucking. :)
This section was probably one of the most...accurate emotional human things you've ever written - its amazing, gets me every time.
Thank you so much! That's a really intense compliment!
I love how...stupid Peter is. He thinks one big cry, one suicidal attempt at heroism and another brainless act of heroism constitutes....healing and getting over his brother. I just wanna tap his shoulder and say, "Peter, it doesn't work that way. You're gonna cry lots."
Yeah. In canon, he gets away with this seamlessly and I just can't swallow it, as I think you know. He's not that strong. No one is. And so I recast it as him thinking he's that strong, and going around in a cloud of denial - thinking 'Oh, I cried about it once and had my little fly around the stars thinking of him, so I'm totally over it now.' So, yes, he's stupid about his own feelings. I like him better that way.
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