Title: Stay Rating: PG-13 Word Count: 1,200 Setting: The Wall Warnings: None Summary: Peter realizes he is unwilling to leave Sylar behind in the world of the Wall.
Great minimal description on the building they've found to camp out in. I can totally see the place just from the window, the blanket, the cardboard boxes and the implications based on what you've written about the buildings around it.
The hypothermia - that's when you're wet and its about freezing temps, correct? The same thing for trench foot.
Then all of a sudden the readers are relieved that Peter's NOT (for once) going to continue a suicide mission. "Death is not the way out". So sweet and this is already saying things about Peter's fame of mind that he's thinking so clearly about Sylar's health now.
Then we get that tiredness at the end of the day, indicated by looking at Sylar so we assume Peter is tired, too.
I love that Peter doesn't finish his sentence there. Because...yeah, what is he gonna say to that? "I'm gonna spoon you"? "I'm gonna get you warm"? So he just shuts up and does it because what's Sylar going to do abut it? Say no? Not likely.
"Maybe we can sleep like this" -- Aww. Peter, you're so sweet. The use of the word 'maybe' is so cute. He's already done it, but verbally he clears it with Sylar by using 'maybe'. Like there's another option...?
And Peter being...nicely, acceptably grabby. Just plain darling. Peter acknowledging that, yes, he knows he's always been capable and able to give those things to Sylar, but he hasn't until now. Interesting because Sylar hasn't done a whole lot of anything to invite that, I guess. No grand gestures of "I'll behave!" or "I've changed!" just following Peter, quietly, to the ends of the earth changes Peter's mind unconsciously (or somewhat consciously).
Oh my. I literally said 'whoa' when Peter said "I won't try to leave you again" because, to me, that was an admission that Peter was trying to get out and would have left Sylar there. Its like owch meets whoa. Maybe because we didn't quite get the picture that that's what Peter was up to all this time.
"He gripped Peter's hand with icy fingers, holding fast to him and saying nothing." -- Lovely. That says so much.
Hypothermia sets in when the body's core temperature drops below a certain range. I forget what it is, but it's possible to get hypothermia at room temperature. Most people are healthy and have good circulatory systems, and their body is competent at generating heat, so it doesn't happen. But people who are very ill (and usually old), or getting transfusions where the fluid isn't warmed to body temp, or have ingested a bunch of cold stuff, and/or are wet and/or exposed to drafts can get hypothermia at temperatures well above freezing.
Plus, just as the landscape is disintegrating out here, Sylar, too, is suffering. It's not just the 'Sylar thinks it's real', which is a big reason for it, but there's also that just as the integrity of the world is breaking down out there, so is Sylar's integrity. This is all Sylar's mind. Peter is an interloper, so Peter is largely the same wherever he goes. But Sylar has a home range, so to speak, and getting outside of that strains him.
Peter realizes that, sort of, intuitively/empathetically. He realizes this is a death march for Sylar and in particular Peter realizes Sylar is willing to take it rather than be left alone ... again. He doesn't want to leave Peter. He'd rather die than go back to that loneliness, but he's (Sylar) isn't going to beg, plead or even try to appeal to Peter to stay. Sylar knows he couldn't ask for that; that he doesn't deserve Peter's company. He killed the man's brother! And then there's everything else. And so Sylar follows along, resolute but depressed, kind of hopeless and enjoying the companionship while he has it, while he's still able to sense it.
Like you say - no grand gestures of 'I've changed!' here. But Peter sees it anyway.
Like I said above to DD3, Peter gives up his stubbornness, which for Peter, is pretty huge. He gives up a "mission" and a goal. He just sets it aside and admits a sort of defeat. He looks at his priorities and he looks over at Sylar suffering quietly in the corner, and Peter rearranges his priorities.
I'm so glad you liked it! Most of these you'd already read, but this one was new (and a different take on the world), so I was looking forward to your thoughts on it.
The hypothermia - that's when you're wet and its about freezing temps, correct? The same thing for trench foot.
Then all of a sudden the readers are relieved that Peter's NOT (for once) going to continue a suicide mission. "Death is not the way out". So sweet and this is already saying things about Peter's fame of mind that he's thinking so clearly about Sylar's health now.
Then we get that tiredness at the end of the day, indicated by looking at Sylar so we assume Peter is tired, too.
I love that Peter doesn't finish his sentence there. Because...yeah, what is he gonna say to that? "I'm gonna spoon you"? "I'm gonna get you warm"? So he just shuts up and does it because what's Sylar going to do abut it? Say no? Not likely.
"Maybe we can sleep like this" -- Aww. Peter, you're so sweet. The use of the word 'maybe' is so cute. He's already done it, but verbally he clears it with Sylar by using 'maybe'. Like there's another option...?
And Peter being...nicely, acceptably grabby. Just plain darling. Peter acknowledging that, yes, he knows he's always been capable and able to give those things to Sylar, but he hasn't until now. Interesting because Sylar hasn't done a whole lot of anything to invite that, I guess. No grand gestures of "I'll behave!" or "I've changed!" just following Peter, quietly, to the ends of the earth changes Peter's mind unconsciously (or somewhat consciously).
Oh my. I literally said 'whoa' when Peter said "I won't try to leave you again" because, to me, that was an admission that Peter was trying to get out and would have left Sylar there. Its like owch meets whoa. Maybe because we didn't quite get the picture that that's what Peter was up to all this time.
"He gripped Peter's hand with icy fingers, holding fast to him and saying nothing." -- Lovely. That says so much.
Only 1,200 words?! That's amazing.
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Plus, just as the landscape is disintegrating out here, Sylar, too, is suffering. It's not just the 'Sylar thinks it's real', which is a big reason for it, but there's also that just as the integrity of the world is breaking down out there, so is Sylar's integrity. This is all Sylar's mind. Peter is an interloper, so Peter is largely the same wherever he goes. But Sylar has a home range, so to speak, and getting outside of that strains him.
Peter realizes that, sort of, intuitively/empathetically. He realizes this is a death march for Sylar and in particular Peter realizes Sylar is willing to take it rather than be left alone ... again. He doesn't want to leave Peter. He'd rather die than go back to that loneliness, but he's (Sylar) isn't going to beg, plead or even try to appeal to Peter to stay. Sylar knows he couldn't ask for that; that he doesn't deserve Peter's company. He killed the man's brother! And then there's everything else. And so Sylar follows along, resolute but depressed, kind of hopeless and enjoying the companionship while he has it, while he's still able to sense it.
Like you say - no grand gestures of 'I've changed!' here. But Peter sees it anyway.
Like I said above to DD3, Peter gives up his stubbornness, which for Peter, is pretty huge. He gives up a "mission" and a goal. He just sets it aside and admits a sort of defeat. He looks at his priorities and he looks over at Sylar suffering quietly in the corner, and Peter rearranges his priorities.
I'm so glad you liked it! Most of these you'd already read, but this one was new (and a different take on the world), so I was looking forward to your thoughts on it.
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