Sometimes I think Sylar's just a big girl about sex, seriously. Seriously, Sylar. Him going 'WHOA!' about being grinded-off on. That or a kid who never healed about some things. The lighter-hearted version amuses me, though.
"Sylar paused to give Peter an exasperated look and to roll his eyes at being patronized. Peter just grinned " -- This was so cute and funny. Like, 'aw, c'mon, gimme a break. I'm not that much of a wuss' Peter: 'oh, okay' (nuzzles) Sylar: (melts) Peter thinks: 'Mission accomplished.'
I do have to ask...why is it Wall-Sylar is paranoid about is neck, from you perspective? I mean...what's his reasonable fears for being in that position?
"Peter was light-headed with desire and the urge to thrust into something was getting overwhelming." -- Good job here. I enjoy Peter's moments of humanity and just plain male urges. Not only are they sexy and dramatic, they enhance the story because its realistic. Its not just 'everything goes perfectly, they kiss like they've known each other all their lives, they have earth-shattering orgasms, get married and live happily ever after'. You're aware that your realism is your talent and its almost a writing style you've perfected. But I like seeing Peter get overwhelmed with sensation and having a need that he indulges mindlessly.
"Peter let him, things having gone far enough that he was comfortable with it now." -- I LOVE this reminder that not only is this from Peter's POV, but Peter is still in charge. Like, in your face in charge. Mindlessly humping and frenching, sure, but HE is ALLOWING Sylar to kiss him how Sylar wants.
"He is so freaking responsive!" -- Peter's going "I barely started grinding on him yet!"
"Sylar said something completely inarticulate at that, clenching Peter's shirt." -- I love that I want to know what he said (tried to say), but I don't. I enjoy feeling that.
I love Sylar's moment of "That's fucking IT!" and grabbing Peter, literally, by the ass. That means Peter did his job VERY well to get him to loosen up and lose it like that. Sylar clearly, uncomplaining, the happy bastard ;)
"The knowledge that Peter had brought Sylar off just by dry-humping him was exactly what Peter wanted." -- I LOVE this! Is Peter seriously surprised here?! Like...what else does he expect? Peter, don't underestimate yourself!
"He reached down with one hand to rub at himself furiously while the other, still fisted in Sylar's hair, brought the man's head back up so Peter could taste him one last time before his own climax." -- Probably one of the hottest sentences in the entire thing.
I don't say this very often (even though its true all the time), but...Dear God, that was smoking hot! Well done. A+
I do have to ask...why is it Wall-Sylar is paranoid about is neck, from you perspective? I mean...what's his reasonable fears for being in that position? I don't think he is, in general, paranoid about his neck. In canon, Peter grabbed him by the neck without reaction. Angela ran her hands around his collar or along his neck a couple times without reaction. Though I find that latter to be actually suspicious, because I feel a "normal" person would have responded - looked down, moved their head a little, had some eye contact checking in about a person's intentions there. Sylar had no reaction whatsoever - which just screams to me "broken" and "damaged goods". It's where I thought you were going at one point in MBU when Sylar first stroked up Peter's wrist.
But for this story? Sylar's showing a semi-normal concern that Peter might bite him or hurt him. He doesn't know the guy all that well and there's a realistic danger, plus a much larger symbolic one that Sylar doesn't know how to handle. He doesn't know what he'll do if Peter pushes him down and dominates him, tries to force him to submit sexually, and is a huge asshole about it - maybe demanding Sylar's indignity and submission as the price of admission. Sylar's afraid he's going to get used or disrespected if he shows his vulnerability.
I LOVE this reminder that not only is this from Peter's POV, but Peter is still in charge. Like, in your face in charge. Yes, and this is part of why Sylar's wary about the neck. Peter's the one dictating whether and how much they kiss; Peter's the one who just climbed on top of him and is going to town; Peter's the one allowing Sylar to kiss him the way Sylar wants to kiss. Any wonder Sylar's subconscious (or conscious mind) is harboring the thought that Peter's domination might take an overt and shaming turn?
Thank you so much for all your kind words!
And be on the lookout for the next "Brick" because it's one you haven't read yet. I had a daydream I recounted to DD3 and she urged me to write it. So she's read it before, but it will be new to you.
"Sylar paused to give Peter an exasperated look and to roll his eyes at being patronized. Peter just grinned " -- This was so cute and funny. Like, 'aw, c'mon, gimme a break. I'm not that much of a wuss' Peter: 'oh, okay' (nuzzles) Sylar: (melts) Peter thinks: 'Mission accomplished.'
I do have to ask...why is it Wall-Sylar is paranoid about is neck, from you perspective? I mean...what's his reasonable fears for being in that position?
"Peter was light-headed with desire and the urge to thrust into something was getting overwhelming." -- Good job here. I enjoy Peter's moments of humanity and just plain male urges. Not only are they sexy and dramatic, they enhance the story because its realistic. Its not just 'everything goes perfectly, they kiss like they've known each other all their lives, they have earth-shattering orgasms, get married and live happily ever after'. You're aware that your realism is your talent and its almost a writing style you've perfected. But I like seeing Peter get overwhelmed with sensation and having a need that he indulges mindlessly.
"Peter let him, things having gone far enough that he was comfortable with it now." -- I LOVE this reminder that not only is this from Peter's POV, but Peter is still in charge. Like, in your face in charge. Mindlessly humping and frenching, sure, but HE is ALLOWING Sylar to kiss him how Sylar wants.
"He is so freaking responsive!" -- Peter's going "I barely started grinding on him yet!"
"Sylar said something completely inarticulate at that, clenching Peter's shirt." -- I love that I want to know what he said (tried to say), but I don't. I enjoy feeling that.
I love Sylar's moment of "That's fucking IT!" and grabbing Peter, literally, by the ass. That means Peter did his job VERY well to get him to loosen up and lose it like that. Sylar clearly, uncomplaining, the happy bastard ;)
"The knowledge that Peter had brought Sylar off just by dry-humping him was exactly what Peter wanted." -- I LOVE this! Is Peter seriously surprised here?! Like...what else does he expect? Peter, don't underestimate yourself!
"He reached down with one hand to rub at himself furiously while the other, still fisted in Sylar's hair, brought the man's head back up so Peter could taste him one last time before his own climax." -- Probably one of the hottest sentences in the entire thing.
I don't say this very often (even though its true all the time), but...Dear God, that was smoking hot! Well done. A+
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I don't think he is, in general, paranoid about his neck. In canon, Peter grabbed him by the neck without reaction. Angela ran her hands around his collar or along his neck a couple times without reaction. Though I find that latter to be actually suspicious, because I feel a "normal" person would have responded - looked down, moved their head a little, had some eye contact checking in about a person's intentions there. Sylar had no reaction whatsoever - which just screams to me "broken" and "damaged goods". It's where I thought you were going at one point in MBU when Sylar first stroked up Peter's wrist.
But for this story? Sylar's showing a semi-normal concern that Peter might bite him or hurt him. He doesn't know the guy all that well and there's a realistic danger, plus a much larger symbolic one that Sylar doesn't know how to handle. He doesn't know what he'll do if Peter pushes him down and dominates him, tries to force him to submit sexually, and is a huge asshole about it - maybe demanding Sylar's indignity and submission as the price of admission. Sylar's afraid he's going to get used or disrespected if he shows his vulnerability.
I LOVE this reminder that not only is this from Peter's POV, but Peter is still in charge. Like, in your face in charge.
Yes, and this is part of why Sylar's wary about the neck. Peter's the one dictating whether and how much they kiss; Peter's the one who just climbed on top of him and is going to town; Peter's the one allowing Sylar to kiss him the way Sylar wants to kiss. Any wonder Sylar's subconscious (or conscious mind) is harboring the thought that Peter's domination might take an overt and shaming turn?
Thank you so much for all your kind words!
And be on the lookout for the next "Brick" because it's one you haven't read yet. I had a daydream I recounted to DD3 and she urged me to write it. So she's read it before, but it will be new to you.
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