My god I dont even know what to say. This is mind blowingly hot, incredibly psychologically complex, and wonderfully emotional. Sylar's emotions...wow. It's just so real and relatable. Like the little contradictions in his feelings, the back and forth, up and down.
I read most of this with my mouth hanging open I think. At some point I was pressed up against the screen. I was wowowowow when Peter got going again. Loved Sylar's clinical testing of Peter's sensitivity. But I most love Sylar wanting so bad to get to be with Peter again, even at the very first. He doesn't even know what the sex will be like and he already wants it again. I love that. Love this. I need to re-read it and damn study it because it is so fricking awesome.
Yeah ... sometimes I write stuff and even I'm like "Whoa, that's awesome. I wanna read it again!" I feel embarrassed to say that, but I've always admitted I'm my own biggest fan.
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Anyway, I wrote this around two sentences: Sylar's cock slid inside of Peter's slicked, prepared body with a ridiculously minor degree of resistance. and Jeez, why don't you just piss on me while you're at it, Petrelli? The idea of Peter being loose and used and having not a shred of shame in that was one I wanted to run with, along with Sylar's reaction to having Peter come on him. If it happened early on in the sexual side of the relationship, I think it would just freak him out, like it did here. For Sylar, it would read as so incredibly ultra-dominant/possessive/degrading that it just flips him out ... but for Peter it's just "you're so hot I wanna come" and it just happens to be on Sylar. Peter thought nothing much of lying in the wet spot; he thinks nothing much of spunking on Sylar
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No continuation?!?! ::Weeps and wails:: Woman! That was the hottest, best, most awesomely complicated sex scene ever. You can't just leave it there!!
Please know that I love when I say ...
PPPPbbbtttt!! Yes, I can! Nyah, nyah, nyah! You can't make me write a continuation!
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Glad you liked the choking. That was a sort of last-minute addition, one of those things where I'm writing along and think "and then Sylar would do *this*" ::writes:: "and what would Peter do in response? Oh! I think Peter would do *this*!" ::writes:: ... where it's just sort of call-and-response between the two muses and I'm not invested in any particular play-by-play, as long as I get to wherever it was I was going. As I mentioned in my 'weekend plans', in my first draft of this I got to the end of the first sex scene and Peter came first. I had to go back and rewrite that to get the emotional tone right for Sylar in the second act. If Sylar hadn't felt like he'd screwed up, then he might not have laid there and let Peter come on him.
I love that Sylar's brain is busy mid-screw here, thinking ... I thought about Peter's POV for this, as I usually do in a scene, but so much of it wouldn't make good copy. The thought process just isn't there. It's more like ::lots of description of sensation and action:: Peter thinking, Oh God that's good. Yeah, that. Oh! Oh! Oh! Oh! Oh yeah! Yeah! God! Yes! Over ... over there. ::wriggles a little:: Oh yeah! Come on. Little faster? Yeah, faster. Oh! Oh! ... /Peter's thoughts. He's not thinking the same way Sylar's thinking and that will give me a real challenge if/when we ever get to that in MBU. Sort of like our latest exchange in MBU where I said Peter's brain was full of static. He's feeling things there and not getting the same easily relatable thought process that Sylar gets. Peter doesn't even always understand what he's thinking. He just gets conclusions and runs with them.
I have no idea what a hotdog in a hallway is (I think I have a clear mental image) and I don't want it explained. I think I'd be scarred. Um ... yeah. It
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I read most of this with my mouth hanging open I think. At some point I was pressed up against the screen. I was wowowowow when Peter got going again. Loved Sylar's clinical testing of Peter's sensitivity. But I most love Sylar wanting so bad to get to be with Peter again, even at the very first. He doesn't even know what the sex will be like and he already wants it again. I love that. Love this. I need to re-read it and damn study it because it is so fricking awesome.
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Anyway, I wrote this around two sentences: Sylar's cock slid inside of Peter's slicked, prepared body with a ridiculously minor degree of resistance.
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Jeez, why don't you just piss on me while you're at it, Petrelli? The idea of Peter being loose and used and having not a shred of shame in that was one I wanted to run with, along with Sylar's reaction to having Peter come on him. If it happened early on in the sexual side of the relationship, I think it would just freak him out, like it did here. For Sylar, it would read as so incredibly ultra-dominant/possessive/degrading that it just flips him out ... but for Peter it's just "you're so hot I wanna come" and it just happens to be on Sylar. Peter thought nothing much of lying in the wet spot; he thinks nothing much of spunking on Sylar ( ... )
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Forgot to mention that I absolutely loved the choking. This story just kept getting better and better. I loved every detail.
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Please know that I love when I say ...
PPPPbbbtttt!! Yes, I can! Nyah, nyah, nyah! You can't make me write a continuation!
:D
Glad you liked the choking. That was a sort of last-minute addition, one of those things where I'm writing along and think "and then Sylar would do *this*" ::writes:: "and what would Peter do in response? Oh! I think Peter would do *this*!" ::writes:: ... where it's just sort of call-and-response between the two muses and I'm not invested in any particular play-by-play, as long as I get to wherever it was I was going. As I mentioned in my 'weekend plans', in my first draft of this I got to the end of the first sex scene and Peter came first. I had to go back and rewrite that to get the emotional tone right for Sylar in the second act. If Sylar hadn't felt like he'd screwed up, then he might not have laid there and let Peter come on him.
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He's not thinking the same way Sylar's thinking and that will give me a real challenge if/when we ever get to that in MBU. Sort of like our latest exchange in MBU where I said Peter's brain was full of static. He's feeling things there and not getting the same easily relatable thought process that Sylar gets. Peter doesn't even always understand what he's thinking. He just gets conclusions and runs with them.
I have no idea what a hotdog in a hallway is (I think I have a clear mental image) and I don't want it explained. I think I'd be scarred. Um ... yeah. It ( ... )
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