Across The Room_Updated 2018
NOTES; Two guys are together, committed to each other for the long run even though, for the present, one wants an open relationship while the other doesn't, but who, because of fear-of-abandonment issues and an honest belief in their love, their destiny, chooses nonetheless to go along. What might happen within him internally as opposed to what he
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His comment: The idea of the essay is to make you use 'if' clauses - if I won I would . . . You have not done this.
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If she won two million euros, what would she… buy, treat herself to? Would she travel around the world? Why not? She had always tried to see as many countries as she could, considering her relatively low finances, of course. However, she would visit only the European countries, Australia, the USA, and perhaps a few countries of South America. Yes, she would avoid too exotic places, for she loved comfort very much. Comfort does not necessarily mean fancy!
She would travel around the world, meet people, and try not to kill them - ha-ha - or, let herself be killed.
She adored black humour.
For the world trip, she would need to buy new clothes and other little things: leather jackets, leather bags, leather rucksacks, leather boots and shoes, leather whatever - and hide from the ‘green’ and animal rights activists.
She could buy a new Hi-Fi system as the old one broke down months ago.
She could leave her job and do things she’d always yearned to do. For example, she could finally learn the art of gardening; lose herself among plants, bushes and rocks, she - invisible to the outside world.
She could study, not caring too much about the school fees, or not having enough time.
If she were smart, she would buy a flat or two, even more, and rent them. She would then have a regular income.
Would she tell someone she won? No, she would not. It wouldn’t be wise. Many jackpot winners ended badly. They lost family and friends. In the end, they had to say good-bye to the prize, too.
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'If I'd won two million euros, I would travel the world...'
'If I'd won two million euros, I could study, not caring...'
Also, to me, it's formatted just a little too much like a listing.
If you want, I could show you what I mean without changing much.
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If you want, I could show you what I mean without changing much.
I would appreciate it very much. Thank you!
I'm going to write another essay, but this time with more "if" sentences than before.
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If I won two million euros, what would I buy or treat myself to?
Would I travel around the world? Why not. I have always tried to see as many countries as I can even considering my relatively inadequate finances, of course. Still, even with money, I would only visit European countries. And Australia and the USA. And perhaps a few countries of South America too. I would avoid exotic places as I love comfort very much which isn’t the same as fancy. Yes, I would travel the world, meeting people, not killing them...just a little black humor. Or letting them kill me...I adore black humor.
Naturally, for traveling, I will need new clothes. And things made of leather like jackets, bags, rucksacks, boots and shoes. Just don’t tell the ‘green’ and animal rights activists because I also adore leather, leather whatever and they might get angry.
Or I could buy a new Hi-Fi system as the old one broke down and I’ve been without music for months.
I could study, not caring too much about fees or time. I could leave my job and finally do all the things I’ve yearned to do. I could learn the art of gardening, losing myself among plants, bushes and rocks, invisible to the outside world. Still, if I were smart, I would buy a flat or two, maybe even more, and rent them and in so doing, have a regular income.
Would I tell anyone I won? No, I wouldn’t, it wouldn’t be wise. There have been too many stories of jackpost winners that end badly. They lose family and friends, and in the end, many had to say good-bye to their winnings too. I think it would be best to just keep quiet.
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I wrote another "if" essay and this time, my teacher was satisfied with it. He also gave me another theme to write about. "If I could choose to be someone else".
He is funny; it seems I have to guess what he wants. Wouldn't it be easier to say "Jelica, as you didn't do your writing properly, you need to rewrite the essay"? But no, he expects from me to have a supernatural power and read his mind.
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