separate and ever deadly (part ii)

[futurebruises]

pairing: het!luchen
rating: nc-17 for sexual scenes, underage drug usage, swearing
genre: high school au, drama??? angst?? fluff?
length: 12.7k words (!!!)
summary: rich teenage assholes fall painfully out of lust and into love. the second of many fics from the same fancy high school au as my mistakes were made for you.
note on genderbent character

Comments

[futurebruises]

ah thanks for pointing that out i swear to god you read something a thousand times and you still miss shit

and yeah, they're awful people but once you spend 5 or 6 thousand words in their shoes the lines start to blur. i wanted to make li hua strong and jongdae human ultimately, and i feel like that more or less happened. and my coauthor is in charge of the baekai and chansoo pieces for this au and she swears she's gonna make chanyeol likable, or at least pitiable, and binhye decent, but we'll see...

also i'm going to write a taohun in this au and i think that those two are going to be pretty innocent and okay people! they're definitely not as bad as li hua and jongdae but a little less fluffy than minseo and yixing. i doubt it'll be up before spring break what with the nightmare that is this school year, but i'm excited to write it anyway ^^

ugh kitty!chen i don't even know why i did that to be honest i think i just wanted a recurring metaphor and he certainly starts out as a cocky tomcat sort of guy and turns into a pathetic little kitten... i'm glad it works.

anyhoo thank you so much for reading this! i really appreciate your comments ^^

[canadaphile]

It's a super easy thing to miss; it was just enough to knock the flow a bit, which is why I noticed it.

Li Hua and Jongdae are both human, definitely. Not the kinds of people you'd willingly want to associate with unless you're the type to want to fix people, but still. You wrote them well. And there seems to be some bits of hope, which makes them easier to read. I'll have to wait and see about Chanyeol being likable. My gut is saying 'no' while my heart is like 'please don't hurt me any more.'

Aw, I'm excited for Taohun. Chuntao seems like a sweetie. Sehun's just kind of been 'there,' but nothing bad's happened with him, at least. Sweet freshman love~ That should be nice. uwu

[futurebruises]

thanks hun! my coauthor says it's really angsty, but that's no different from the whole au.

and yeah! chuntao's pretty cool, and sehun is a bit of an apathetic loner type - kind of like a sassier, more cynical, less rich yixing. and freshman year is totally the best year for romantic drama imo because you don't know people very well yet and don't recognize their flaws, plus all of their flaws are more borne of ignorance and innocence than of actual deficits of character. i'm glad i left it for last, tbh, because the luchen was such a relative bummer character-wise and it kinda burned me out on writing (which probably a good thing tbh i have to write six essays by wednesday ugh) but i know that the taohun will be fun to write and a little more lighthearted. <3

[canadaphile]

More angst? Fuck that, man. I'm kidding. Hit me with your best shot, broskis. Just let me paint this giant target over my heart.

Six essays by Wednesday? Good gravy. Best of luck with that. I am so glad I'm no longer in school. Something light-hearted will definitely be a nice pick-me-up. Both to write and read. I'm honestly surprised there aren't more freshman-aged romances being written. They're rather sweet, even if they are naive and dumb and don't last. That's part of the Romance.

[futurebruises]

this au is ridiculous it was our caffeinated 5 am post-all-nighter brainchild we never intended for it to get this intense

orz yeah i mean to be fair, it was assigned three weeks ago and they're just brief rhetorical analyses but it definitely requires a lot more effort than i've been putting in haH i think i've written opening paragraphs for two of them??? oh well. as far as essays go, they're not so bad.

indeed. my own freshman year, i totally fell for this stupid stoner kid, and i think we kissed twice before he started dating some other girl and it was totally heartbreaking at the time. fifteen-year-old emotions are the best and most intense, especially if i'm writing them and i can give everyone happy endings lol ;;

[canadaphile]

You guys need your own subtitle: [fanfic intensifies]

I rarely did anything until the day or day before it was due, but it still sounds like a lot. You'll get it done. Throw on some heavy metal and pretend you're Charlemagne, conquering villages and impaling your enemies on pikes when you're actually writing rhetorical analyses. [I'm a college grad,and I still don't know what a rhetorical essay thing is. Higher education at its best, man. Good luck.]

Wow. Way to choose 'em. Gives you experience, though. You know more than you did then, and you can give happy endings even if you didn't get yours at that time.

[futurebruises]

indeed, indeed. our friendship is 98% based in fic.

lol yeah i'm gonna be in the mountains all weekend so i'm definitely gonna pull a night-before sort of thing with my old hardcore playlists and some tea... i can get pretty impassioned about those essays and write them fast orz it's basically just using fancy words to describe the linguistic devices an author uses to convey their purpose?? i think?? i took a semester-long course on semantics from the same teacher and never learnt what semantics really meant.

and totally! he was a jerk and i think he's going prematurely bald now. so. i think i won overall. i think the taohun will end a lot prettier than that, though.

[canadaphile]

That sounds about right. I never understood those big words. I might know what they do, but I won't know the word that encompasses the meaning. Semantics, far as I can recall, is basically the meaning of words. There are branches, but who cares? I have a feeling I learned that in psych, not even an English class.

If there's an antagonist in the Taohun story, have them prematurely balding. It'll be funny. Like "Wow, I may not be perfect, but at least I have hair." Childish, but funny. I'm mature. After all the angst, it'll be a shock that there is humour in life, yet.

[futurebruises]

orz i'm basically just good at bullshitting things tbh so i make it through with good scores and grades even if i have no idea what i'm talking about. and yeah, i thought i was getting myself into a course like that, but we ended up doing absolutely nothing relating to that besides a week or two on connotation. it's over now, though, and i pulled a 97% in the class, so all is well!

and yeah i think i put an antagonist like that in one of my old original fics from around then haaaah ; A ; we'll see if my coauthor will let me make anyone go bald. even if not, i'll try to stick in some comic relief. <3

[canadaphile]

I've been that way since the beginning of high school. Now, I even have a BS degree. uwu All academics cares about is a letter or number grade; you're good in that sense. It's only when you need the knowledge that you ended up not getting. . . then there's regret.

Tell your coauthor I'll cry if there's no balding. That's my blackmail. I'll bottle my tears and pour them all over their pillows while they sleep. Taste the salty ocean of my dismay. That was almost poetic. Potential heartbreak can be pretty.