New Pirates of the Caribbean Fic: Fall from Grace 1/1

[fried_flamingo]

Title: Fall from Grace
Author: Laura H fried_flamingo
Rating: R (for adult themes and bad language)
Pairing: Jack/Elizabeth, Jack/Other
Category: Elizabeth PoV

Author's note: Ok, so this is the result of a little experiment salr323 and I cooked up in chat the other night. The challenge involved a random Word of the Day Generator, a limit of 500 words and a time limit

Comments

[awickedwench]

He pressed a kiss to the woman’s lips, so soft and yet so enticing that it made Elizabeth’s breath catch in her throat, and then stepped back with a sketched bow.

It's fun to see you explore different writing styles. Really enjoyed the twist this one took; so many layers to these characters! Saving to mems--Good job!

[fried_flamingo]

Thank you! It was fun to write and I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

[komandant_krech]

Heheh -- for a while I thought the red dress was the same Barbossa made Elizabeth wear in CotBP :D

Very nice story, and so lovely to see Jack being Jack (now, of course that woman could've been his sister, or something, but somehow I rather like to think no ;)). Nice twist too, Elizabeth's envy (jealousy?) and her wish to be feminine yet again. Surely there must've been moments when she'd thought it'd be nice to wear a soft, silky dress again and smell of something else but salt and tar :p

Kudos to you (and salr323) for writing pieces like this in an hour and a half -- would take a month for me, lol!

[fried_flamingo]

LOL that's what sal said too. I hadn't thought about that when I was writing it, but I see how it could appear that way.

Um, no I don't think she was his sister lol. What I wanted to show was that his gift of the dress was a caring gesture, though he'd like to keep up the facade of lothario.

I think also despite Elizabeth's strength and power she's still female and would perhaps long to feel pretty every once in a while.

Sal and I had such fun writing them, so I'll try and twist her arm to do it again :D

[komandant_krech]

What I wanted to show was that his gift of the dress was a caring gesture,

Oh yeah, I got that -- I was vague with my own words, lol. I have hard time to see Jack ever going totally monogamous, but neither can I imagine him treating any of his 'lady friends' badly, even if they were 'just' whores.

[fried_flamingo]

Thank you so much! I'm really pleased that you enjoyed the story!

I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for your new chapter btw. You've got me hooked!

[tuesday_suit]

He pressed a kiss to the woman’s lips, so soft and yet so enticing that it made Elizabeth’s breath catch in her throat, and then stepped back with a sketched bow.

Gah, so much lurks beneath the surface in this one! Quick, beautiful, every sentence a story in itself. And the ending, that one statement that makes it clear how together they are despite everything. Lovely.

[fried_flamingo]

Thank you so much, love! And I'm glad the strength of their relationship at this point came across. I do think it'd be unique in that Elizabeth would never resent Jack being who he is and vice versa.

Thanks for reading :)

[kseenaa]

That was indeed very nice. I can see how Elisabeth sometimes might miss the feeling of actually be... feminine... :-) Nicely done.

[fried_flamingo]

Thank you so much. I do think Elizabeth would miss the feminine trappings she once had, despite her kingship and all.