to enter as if unawares

[frakcancer]

For ar_drabbles challenge #50, "fall." Thank you, bsg_aussiegirl, for posting early this week.

Comments

[bsg_aussiegirl]

When I thought that I wouldn't be home in time this arvo I thought 'oooh, I'd better post before I go out for Frak!' Sometimes it pays to be a co-mod. ;)

Are you sure you couldn't get any more falls or fells into this? I don't think you were trying.

Seriously, I love how you made it sad and sexy at the same time. And the last line made me think of the Hub. Was that deliberate? Knowing you, it was.

[frakcancer]

Sometimes it pays to be a co-mod.

It certainly does!

Are you sure you couldn't get any more falls or fells into this?

When you run out of ideas, go for clever. That's my motto.

And the last line made me think of the Hub. Was that deliberate? Knowing you, it was.

You do indeed know me. JUMP!

[akachankami]

(*o*) ... and then (*o*)
sometimes i wonder how english speaking people can really understand if they catch so many meanings into one word XD this is such a smart use of the prompt!
i can't complain, there is everything in 200 words: angst, love, a hint of smut, and laura falling into blue eyes ♥
great last line! =)

hello speedy! i can crawl back to bed now

[frakcancer]

That's the secret of English speaking people -- they really don't understand each other; they're just faking it.

i can't complain, there is everything in 200 words
Thank you! I was kinda happy when I got it all to fall into place.

[nvgvup]

I was kinda happy when I got it all to fall into place.

You were just waiting to use that line, weren't you?!!

[frakcancer]

I should have known you wouldn't fall for the idea that it was spur-of-the-moment.

[nvgvup]

Simply wonderful. This is a beautiful self-reflection for Laura and a wonderful last line.
I love how you encompass so many different emotions and responsibilities in just 200 words.

I also think you win the award for knocking the prompt out of the ballpark!!!

[frakcancer]

Thank you! The idea just came to me, fell right into my hands like fruit falling off a tree.

[sln1]

I thought I was supposed to be the sneaky one! How am I supposed to come up with an original use of the prompt when you have already incorporated so many uses of the word 'fall' into one drabble?

All those meanings do emphasis all the different elements in Laura's life in those early days of The Fleet very effectively; so much to think about, so much to try and hold together even when everything seems to have fallen apart.

I am impressed and slightly annoyed by your cleverness all at once! Thank you.

[frakcancer]

You are the sneaky one That's why I had to sneak this in before you could.

As for taking so many uses of the word, let's don't make me out to be the fall-guy. It's Aussie's prompt. All responsibility should fall on her!

[sln1]

I'd be sticking my tongue out at you now if that was not an unseemly and immature thing to do!

[whatever_lj]

This reads like a dream-poem... I love it.

[frakcancer]

Thank you. I realize, having read your comment, that I write early Laura a lot in that tone.