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frakcancer

That thing that turns to a star

Oct 22, 2010 12:45

A sort of sequel to Your life is a stone in you. bsg_aussiegirl said I could.

This is for her, in case the first part wasn't romantic enough.

Rule 1: Even if you're going to break the rules, get permission.
Rule 2: frakcancer obviously can't write smut in under 600 words, so this isn't even quite M, no matter what I promised some people this morning.
Rule 3: frakcancer has problems ( Read more... )

ar_drabbles, aussie's a romantic fool

Comments 19

whatever_lj October 22 2010, 11:16:11 UTC

Oh, splendid! Just splendid! Bravo!

This is my absolute favorite thing -- flirty, funny, dialogue -- done to perfection.

I could have read up to this line and have left the story happy: "There's more to being alive than sex."
"You sure?"
"There'd better be, or I haven't been alive in a while."

But then there was this paragraph-- probably one of the sexiest graphs in the Adama Roslin library:
He pushes her down onto the sandbags, rests her head on his chest, and he whispers to her of dark desires, of sensibility and sensuality, of degeneracy and domesticity. Of wanting to recite poetry against her thighs, of coming home to her, of talking through the night and into the day. Of prose and perversions and power, telling her a story, reciting his needs as though they were some character's in a book.

And this little idea -- you could write a whole story about the import of this line, in fact, it's actually a credo for the whole BSG universe: "You can't borrow time. You have it or you don't."Thanks for writing this, friend. ( ... )

frakcancer October 22 2010, 12:27:06 UTC

I'm always so pleased when you like something I write. As I've said before, often, you're semi-responsible for the almost 40,000 words of fanfic I've churned out in the last 10 months.

I think you're right about how essential the idea of borrowed time is to BSG -- what people do and don't do is based on how they understand the relevance of the lives they're leading after the Fall, what they regret and what choices they savor, whether they're at peace with themselves or at war.

angeltrisha9 October 22 2010, 14:26:03 UTC

Oh, brilliant! I'm trying to find just one thing to tell you I loved, but the whole thing is awesome!

frakcancer October 23 2010, 16:35:47 UTC

Hey, overarching praise makes me happy, too -- glad you liked it!

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frakcancer October 23 2010, 16:36:13 UTC

Playful stones Laura is fun, isn't she?

sln1 October 22 2010, 15:34:25 UTC

Trying to coherently review a great fic while keeping an eye and ear out for the ice cream van is surprisingly challenging. The eye part is especially difficult since I am at the back of the house and it drives up to the front. Why I have my heart set on a ice cream when it's about 5C outside is another matter entirely, it's possible I may not be entirely sane ( ... )

frakcancer October 23 2010, 16:44:34 UTC

I'd send you ice cream if I could, but despite record highs here, there was no decent flavor in the stores, so we had to make do with homemade chocolate sorbet this weekend.

Bill wrestles with his dreams and his demons, his hopes and fears and everything he has wrapped up in Laura Roslin.

That's something I was thinking about this weekend -- how Bill is very outer-directed, wrapping up his hopes and dreams in other people. Since the Fall, it's been Lee (who had been distant before) and Laura, before the Fall Saul and Kara.

bsg_aussiegirl October 22 2010, 21:56:24 UTC

When you told me they were yapping too much instead of secksing, I meant to tell you I love it when they talk during/after/before sex. So, this still makes me happy.

"There'd better be, or I haven't been alive in a while." Even though this line is funny and everything, I also like that Bill admits such things to her. He doesn't act the big tough man with her.

"Bill? Should I make that an order?"

He can see her moving above him, riding the waves of his laugh. "You're not the president. You can't boss me around."

"Of course I can." Oh yeah. Go Laura! She has Bill exactly where she wants him. And she knows he loves every minute of it.

Of wanting to recite poetry against her thighs Okay, that has got to be one of the sexiest things I've ever read. Not claptrap at all.

"I'm afraid of everything, Bill. I thought you knew that." Such an interesting line. And makes me think of the way Bill protects her in such subtle ways while still letting her make the tough decisions ( ... )

frakcancer October 23 2010, 17:11:18 UTC

This could work out well. You post chapters of L&C, you get claptrap.

And I'm so glad you like talking!Laura 'n' Bill, since I write them so much more easily than secksing!Lauara 'n' Bill.

I like to think that on NC they had nothing to hide from each other -- she had no responsibilities and he could see her as a woman and not the president, so they could confess their fears and dreams to each other. That vision is also mu justification for why the two of them are so obsessed with the day of the groundbreaking, all the way to the end.