A fic - TO BE OPENED IN THE EVENT OF MY DEATH

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Dear, beloved Ginny,

Comments

[dustthouart]

I like this but it's far too erudite and well-written to be from Harry. ^_^ His would be more likely to be some scribbed notation "I love you and don't be sad too long ok and I'm doing this for you PS DON'T KISS DEAN". Kidding. ^_^

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I do not think anyone would "scribble" their probably last letter to the most important person in their world. This was inspired by the last letter of a British soldier who died in Afghanistan recently, which his fiancee read on the news. It was very carefully written - she showed the autograph copy - and evidently the result of a few drafts.

[un_crayon_rouge]

I liked this a lot, and I agree, this would be a carefully drafted letter. A true and wonderful feeling shows through though.

What I miss is a little bit of personal details, maybe something he remembers doing with Ginny, a walk or the first time he kissed her or just eating a meal together, something that would seem unimportant to anyone else. After all, they only *did* have a couple of weeks together. Those details would roam large in his mind, it seems to me.

Or maybe I'd have liked more comment about *why* it is that he loves her this much. Just because she is what she is seems a little vague. This is probably the only thing she'll have to hold on to if he indeed does not come back. I personally would long for a little more specificity.

But, then it would be my fanfic and not yours... excellent, really.

[asakiyume]

It's too sad almost to read. You have a way of really conveying deep, heart-rending love.

You mentioned in your comment to dustthouart that you were inspired by a letter by a British soldier to his fiancee--you described it being read on the news... I don't suppose you know of a place to see that letter, online? ..as a television news story, though, probably not, I'm guessing. But if there is, I'd like to read it.

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http://www.dailymail.co.uk/pages/live/articles/news/news.html?in_article_id=463484&in_page_id=1770

[asakiyume]

Thank you. He was two years older than my oldest son.

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And what a handsome couple they made, too.

[elskuligr]

I really liked the idea of the last letter and I think this fic is awfully sweet... but I also thought dustthouart's comment was oh so true! I'm sure your Harry took some potion to quicken his wit before he wrote that letter :o) ... or maybe he just became an adult, I don't know...

Anyway, I hope you don't mind, I kind of stole your idea and tried to write a last letter that would be a bit more awkward and hesitant, to reflect how Harry is not always very eloquent.
If you're curious about how I butchered your beautiful idea, you can have a look it's on my lifejournal.

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I read it, it's excellent, probably better than mine, and I recommend my friends to go and read it in turn.