Please be kind to this one. I have an idea that it might not go down well, but it is represents a vision I tried to achieve - how successfully, I don't know... ( Read more... )
Okay - disclaimer: I'm no H/G fan. ;) What struck me first is that some of the lyrics should go; in a songfic you should only keep the few lines that underline the point of your text. For instance: Like a river flows Surely to the sea Darling so it goes Some things are meant to be...is repeated twice. Remove them both, I'd say; keep two/three lines from each verse
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What struck me first is that some of the lyrics should go; in a songfic you should only keep the few lines that underline the point of your text. For instance:
Like a river flows
Surely to the sea
Darling so it goes
Some things are meant to be...is repeated twice. Remove them both, I'd say; keep two/three lines from each verse ( ... )
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Sorry 'bout that.
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