Fanfiction, Senses: Smell II
Title: Under the veil
Author: Fourangers
Genre: weird story. That counts as a genre, right? Ok, and there’s drama.
Rating: M
Word Count: 8.000
Warnings: I think that the rating speaks by itself…:P NaruSasu lime.
Summary: When your resolute mind is able to block the desires of your heart, there’s only one way to relieve the passion. Surround yourself ( Read more... )
Author: Fourangers
Genre: weird story. That counts as a genre, right? Ok, and there’s drama.
Rating: M
Word Count: 8.000
Warnings: I think that the rating speaks by itself…:P NaruSasu lime.
Summary: When your resolute mind is able to block the desires of your heart, there’s only one way to relieve the passion. Surround yourself ( Read more... )
Sasuke's behaviour was kinda hreat-breaking, but completely understandable. I mean it was obvious enough that he had feelings for Naruto and Naruto was married and was hokage and no one else liked Sasuke so... :(
“C’mon…Sasuke. There’s no need to be this formal to me you know…I called all the guards off, you don’t need to fake all this useless things…”
Naruto trying to hard...
But yeah I really liked when Naruto finally managed to force a reaction out of Sasuke. *smile* And afterwards with Naruto thinking over things... It's so funny that he thought things over for so long and then suddenly went all 'oh noes! I've been waiting for too long, and Sasuke might be depressed now, and we all know he does stuff like... tries to kill people and run away to snake-perverts when he gets depressed! D: I need to go NOW!' *laugh*
“Ho-“ Sasuke inquired.
“Sasuke!” Naruto shouted out of a sudden,
So awesome. *laugh*
And the lime was well-written I think. *hurr*
The Uchiha chuckled briefly. “You can only focus in one goal in your vision, my presence and Konoha had always fought for your priority, we can’t coexist when both of us demand your full attention. That’s why I’m willing to be the second of your life for the first time…I’m willing to relinquish.”
This... oh gods this... I don't think it's truly possible for Naruto to put Sasuke second (which neither Naruto or Sasuke seem to really think in here either after all haha). It's nice how you touched one of the bigger themes in the manga this way. So nicely done too.
And Sasuke's 'transformation' as ending...
I really enjoy your writings a lot. *smile*
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Yeah....the first part was more like "I'm tired of reading Hokage!Naruto fics where Naruto doesn't do his work, he's only Sasuke's bitch or he's too busy having sex with Sasuke on the Hokage's desk" reaction rather than...anything. >_> Doesn't they realize how heavy is the task of taking care of a city?
I also liked the part where he still tries to protect Sasuke, because in a way he's still the same Naruto but he's more mature to negotiate with the councils. :3
Sasuke's behaviour was kinda hreat-breaking, but completely understandable. I mean it was obvious enough that he had feelings for Naruto and Naruto was married and was hokage and no one else liked Sasuke so... :(
Yeah....poor Sasuke :( But initially, I wanted to put the reason for Sasuke to do that, is because he finally realized that Naruto is the bringer of peace, and he finally understood Itachi's teaching. That's why he knew that if Naruto concentrate on him again, he wouldn't be able to concentrate on bringing peace in the ninja world.
Didn't explain this part well. (sigh)
But yeah I really liked when Naruto finally managed to force a reaction out of Sasuke. *smile* And afterwards with Naruto thinking over things... It's so funny that he thought things over for so long and then suddenly went all 'oh noes! I've been waiting for too long, and Sasuke might be depressed now, and we all know he does stuff like... tries to kill people and run away to snake-perverts when he gets depressed! D: I need to go NOW!' *laugh*
Funniest part of this is that this were one of the moments that I wrote without thinking, simply letting the character write by himself. XD I'm glad that you liked though. :P
This... oh gods this... I don't think it's truly possible for Naruto to put Sasuke second (which neither Naruto or Sasuke seem to really think in here either after all haha). It's nice how you touched one of the bigger themes in the manga this way. So nicely done too.
I also don't think, that's why Naruto still insists on freeing Sasuke despite his past actions. That's why Naruto still liked to train with Sasuke despite the criticism. Sasuke was still the first in his mind, but Sasuke reminded Naruto to put as second.
It makes me sad that now, more than never, Sasuke and Konoha are battling on Naruto's mind (in the latest manga) I'm wondering how this is going after that...:(
And Sasuke's 'transformation' as ending...
Bittersweet....but necessary. :(
I really enjoy your writings a lot. *smile*
Thnks DW! XD
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I also liked the part where he still tries to protect Sasuke, because in a way he's still the same Naruto but he's more mature to negotiate with the councils. :3
Urgh yeah a lot of those fics around. >.> Even though I can completely see Naruto using bunshins for some smaller stuff. XD
And yes I really liked the negotiations with the council! He was still Naruto but a more grown-up Naruto. *smile*
Yeah....poor Sasuke :( But initially, I wanted to put the reason for Sasuke to do that, is because he finally realized that Naruto is the bringer of peace, and he finally understood Itachi's teaching. That's why he knew that if Naruto concentrate on him again, he wouldn't be able to concentrate on bringing peace in the ninja world.
Didn't explain this part well. (sigh)
Yeah well it's hard to write out everything. =P Now when you say it straight out I can that it was there... But I didn't notice it exactly on my own. >.>
I also don't think, that's why Naruto still insists on freeing Sasuke despite his past actions. That's why Naruto still liked to train with Sasuke despite the criticism. Sasuke was still the first in his mind, but Sasuke reminded Naruto to put as second.
It makes me sad that now, more than never, Sasuke and Konoha are battling on Naruto's mind (in the latest manga) I'm wondering how this is going after that...:(
Yeah... I forgot to mention that I liked the facts that you never really mentioned who Naruto's wife were. ;) Let the reader decide a bit for themselves. *smile*
I know... Somehow everyone asks Naruto to choose between Konoha and Sasuke. *sigh*
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