Fic--Even If Your Heart Stops

Apr 29, 2013 12:02


Title: Even If Your Heart Stops

Author: foreverwriting9

Characters/Pairings: Jane/Lisbon

Spoilers: Vaguely for Red Velvet Cupcakes

Rating: G

Word Count: 2,420

Summary: In that moment he sees everything they are and everything they could be laid out in front of him. It is beautiful and shining and brimming with impossibility.

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jane/lisbon, fic, tv: the mentalist

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chizuru_chibi April 29 2013, 16:24:20 UTC
I hope you post this on ffnet at some point so I can add it to my favorites.

There were so many heartfelt, excellent lines in this fic. Your writing always has such a softness, I don't know how to describe it. You manage to make them both say things that, if the wording was different, it may sound weird and cheesy. But it doesn't here. It sounds true, vulnerable and just.. lovely.

The mix between canon and "fic" blends so well. I almost feel the final part of the fic will be the scene we probably won't get to see after the finale (not that I know anything about it, haven't even watched the promo), because it rings so very true with how they are.

I just can't get over how subtle and sweet this fic is. You show they love each other without ever saying the word.

This is precious ♥

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foreverwriting9 April 29 2013, 22:58:54 UTC
Don't worry, I posted it on ff.net!

I absolutely love getting your comments. They easily make my day, and help keep me motivated to continue writing. And I'm so glad that you enjoyed this fic, I had a really good time writing it.

I absolutely cannot wait for the finale, it's going to be fantastic.

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lzod April 29 2013, 17:48:59 UTC
That was adorable! :)

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foreverwriting9 April 29 2013, 22:59:27 UTC
I'm glad you liked it!

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della57 April 30 2013, 20:30:24 UTC
I really enjoyed this. The ending was so touching. It's a scene I would love to see on the show someday. Any chance you'll add a second chapter with their dinner?

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foreverwriting9 April 30 2013, 22:50:58 UTC
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. As for a sequel, it's always a possibility, but I make no promises!

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altitudeandwine February 2 2014, 18:36:39 UTC
I just ratted you out on tumblr, because I wanted to share the joy of reading your fic.
Hope you don't mind.
Actually you can hardly blame me, not really, writing them both in character and endearment like you do.

I can't stay to chat, I saw there was more where this came from.

Just a question, no criticism, just a need to know thingy:
Will you ever get past the UST before canon does?

I kinda hope you will.

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foreverwriting9 April 30 2014, 03:02:16 UTC
Crap, I can't believe I forgot to respond to all your lovely comments. Thank you, thank you, thank you! Your enjoyment of my stories really means the world to me. Feedback and encouragement is a major factor in why I keep writing.

In answer to your question: I have a few fics that explore them being in an actual relationship, but they're normally just quick scenes, I think. I'm still not totally comfortable writing them with anything more than UST.

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