Constructive Criticism and Characterization Exercise
[Moved here to avoid forcing the obligation for constructive criticism upon anyone, including myself.]
Qui-Gon was so terribly intimidating to me, at first. I think he's the sort of character that either rings true from the first post, or never quite works thereafter, and I like to think I've kept fundamentally true to his voice. In a sense, the strength of his voice has always made him easy for me to play. We agree about the vast majority of island issues, and even when we do disagree...he's the sort of character with whom a mun can have an effective discussion, ha. His motivations have always been clear to me, and while I don't always agree with the consequences of his actions, I deeply understand why he behaves as he does. His heart directs him first, and he has an astonishing capacity to rationalize desire with duty. If he wants something badly enough, he will find a way to reconcile it with the will of the Force.
My greatest worry is that during the course of my characterization, he's lost the edge to his personality, the defiance that led him willfully against the Jedi Council in canon. Part of that I meant to be the influence of his death--he trusted his own motivations implicitly before his arrival on the island, but since learning of Anakin's fall and the destruction of the Jedi, he has lost a great deal of his surety. While he mentions his obstinacy often, I'm not entirely sure I've shown the characteristic to full effect, especially in his relationship with Claire. I expected them to argue more, honestly, and I hope their tendency to agree hasn't made them dull together.
I have a lot of regrets for Qui-Gon's time on the island, most of them dealing with Obi-Wan, of course. Quite a lot of the time, I worried that the depth of his affection for Obi-Wan was overdone, or seemed ridiculous or completely AU. I did my best to play it down with Qui-Gon's own worry over his motivations where Obi-Wan was concerned, but I'm not sure that I managed it well overall. Losing Obi-Wan hurt him badly, and the more recent disappearance of Luke has left him as the last Jedi on the island. While he values his solitude, he dislikes being alone, and the absence of the Force has left a certain hollowness. I'm grateful that all those factors have led to his current intimacy with Claire, but I worry that he seems excessively woeful or angsty when I post him.
And I need to post more often. That's true on all accounts, and it's a huge frustration for me at the moment. My current job is messing with my schedule a LOT, and my life needs some reorganization. Qui-Gon is still my main character at TR, and that's unlikely to change, but I know I ought to tag new people with him, rather than expecting people to tag into his entrance posts. I still have things I'd like to do with him, like letting him train someone else on the island. Maybe a new goal is what I really need.
Qui-Gon was so terribly intimidating to me, at first. I think he's the sort of character that either rings true from the first post, or never quite works thereafter, and I like to think I've kept fundamentally true to his voice. In a sense, the strength of his voice has always made him easy for me to play. We agree about the vast majority of island issues, and even when we do disagree...he's the sort of character with whom a mun can have an effective discussion, ha. His motivations have always been clear to me, and while I don't always agree with the consequences of his actions, I deeply understand why he behaves as he does. His heart directs him first, and he has an astonishing capacity to rationalize desire with duty. If he wants something badly enough, he will find a way to reconcile it with the will of the Force.
My greatest worry is that during the course of my characterization, he's lost the edge to his personality, the defiance that led him willfully against the Jedi Council in canon. Part of that I meant to be the influence of his death--he trusted his own motivations implicitly before his arrival on the island, but since learning of Anakin's fall and the destruction of the Jedi, he has lost a great deal of his surety. While he mentions his obstinacy often, I'm not entirely sure I've shown the characteristic to full effect, especially in his relationship with Claire. I expected them to argue more, honestly, and I hope their tendency to agree hasn't made them dull together.
I have a lot of regrets for Qui-Gon's time on the island, most of them dealing with Obi-Wan, of course. Quite a lot of the time, I worried that the depth of his affection for Obi-Wan was overdone, or seemed ridiculous or completely AU. I did my best to play it down with Qui-Gon's own worry over his motivations where Obi-Wan was concerned, but I'm not sure that I managed it well overall. Losing Obi-Wan hurt him badly, and the more recent disappearance of Luke has left him as the last Jedi on the island. While he values his solitude, he dislikes being alone, and the absence of the Force has left a certain hollowness. I'm grateful that all those factors have led to his current intimacy with Claire, but I worry that he seems excessively woeful or angsty when I post him.
And I need to post more often. That's true on all accounts, and it's a huge frustration for me at the moment. My current job is messing with my schedule a LOT, and my life needs some reorganization. Qui-Gon is still my main character at TR, and that's unlikely to change, but I know I ought to tag new people with him, rather than expecting people to tag into his entrance posts. I still have things I'd like to do with him, like letting him train someone else on the island. Maybe a new goal is what I really need.