Revolve- Heroes Fanfiction -Heroes15 Challenge

[force_oblique]

Title: Revolve
Author: force-oblique
Rating: G
Disclaimer:Obviously , i dont own anything! :P
Characters/Pairings: Eden McCain /A bit of Sylar
Table/Prompt: Table #7, "Revolve"
Word Count: 1669
Summary: Eden's Final moments trying to rid the world of the threat that is "Sylar"
Author's Notes: Not really spoilerish..Only if you haven't seen 1x11. Really my first

Comments

[ghost_goodthing]

Okay, first off.:WOW! I loved it. There isn't a single line or word use I don't like. I should say love 'cause that's a perfect word for what I think.
I haven't read any Heroes fics before not that I like the show it's more the fact that I love anything angst and the series hasn't got that much of that. But you proved me wrong. I like the fact that you picked Eden to be the centre character. She faded away so quickly and her death was kind of just another step in the show. But you made us, the reader, notice her.
What I admire about any author wheather its a fanfiction author or a book author is the way they can make you feel. Any author that can provoke feelings in their reader is really, really good. Any author that can make the reader sit up and notice the character is really good. I think you are one of them. You kind of had me from hallo there; you had me from the first part. You had me being nervous almost afraid for the character. I love the way you describe her. Every word you use makes us the readers feel for her, understand her and her battles with herself. You understand the character that other people created.
As I said before, I love every single line 'cause it's not out of character, it doesn't take the scene lightly and there is a inner battle going on ( which the angst whore in me really, really loves ).
So I applaud you.
Now, I wish my muse would come back so I can try my hand at writing...*sigh*

Keep it coming..and make my day with the beauty...

[force_oblique]

Wow! Thanks!!! I wasnt expecting such an enthusiastic response but i am really happy and thankful for it! :)
I never thought that it would speak to you in that way but i am thrilled it did.
I really liked Eden, she had a lot of potential and the way she was depicted in the show..so shortly didnt do her character justice. She would have been a really cool character to watch.
That was my intention exactly. To have you sympathize with her and make you wonder about her. Hehe, Yay for me! I did it!
Thanks a lot for your kind words. They were really encouraging and inspiring.
Actually i am currently finishing my next story for the challenge,focusing on the word "Elusive". A Sylar story with a twist~ I will probably send it to you to beta it if you dont mind. I am mostly focusing on short fiction now because that is all i have time for.

I am hoping for your muse to visit you again because i love reading and i wouldnt miss it!