and we lean in

[spyglass_]

Title: And We Lean In
Rating: PG-13
Category: Jane/Lisbon
Word Count: 1179
Disclaimer: Yeah, right.
Spoilers: Specific references to Red Hair and Silver Tape, Ladies in Red, and Carnelian Inc. In my head, this is set after Miss Red and before Red John’s Footsteps.
Summary: “Is that supposed to make me feel special?”
Author’s Notes: I was working on

Comments

[artic_fox]

Awesome! I really liked this - both are very in character, and your writing is solid and honest. There needs to be more fic like this in the fandom.

[boutondor]

I definitely second this. This was great and I hope you write more Mentalist fics in the very near future :)

[spyglass_]

Thank you! I'm working on another one right now - we'll see how long it takes me to finish it :)

[spyglass_]

Thanks! I'm glad you felt it was in character :)

[pearl_star]

Oh this was great ^.^ Thank you for posting it!

[spyglass_]

Glad you enjoyed :)

[muzzy_olorea]

:D:D:D:D

(Also, LOVE Mat Kearney)

I've already told you how much I love this hun. The revisions made it go from very good to perfect!

Now, when's the next fic coming? :)

[spyglass_]

Dude, did I know you liked Mat Kearney? I feel like I did not.

Seriously, I'm glad you enjoyed. I did not realize how rough the first draft was until Pam helped me pick it apart last night. Also, glad you thought the revisions worked out :D

Now, when's the next fic coming? :)

SOON, I swear. I need to get my unfinished drafts off of my hard drive before Opening Day for MLB (LOL, you know you love me ♥ )

[chizuru_chibi]

Aww, very canon-y! They seem a lot like themselves, which is something pretty hard to acheive.

The 'twice' line killed me.

I gotta admit I missed a bit of 'romancing' though, like a line/paragraph or two after "She isn’t expecting an answer, but he gives her one anyway."

Other than that, really spot-on. I'm looking foward to read more from you :)!

[spyglass_]

The 'twice' line killed me.

Hee, thanks. I set the entire fic up around the morning after scene, so I'm glad you liked that line.

I never really intended to put any specific romancing in, sorry! I tried some out and it didn't fit with the rest of the story, so I gutted it. I'm glad you mostly enjoyed, though :)

[boutondor]

"I never really intended to put any specific romancing in, sorry! I tried some out and it didn't fit with the rest of the story, so I gutted it."

Oh I completely understand this. Sometimes you write a scene, knowing that it's right to put it there, but it doesn't work and feels so wrong no matter how many times you try to write it. I think it's always better to delete it.

I love the cropping of your icon, by the way. Very cool.

[spyglass_]

Yes, I'm glad you know what I mean! I thought about being more explicit there, but when I tried it out, it sounded cheesy and didn't fit with the tone of the rest of the story. Both Jane and Lisbon have such specific voices that I didn't want to risk it by being too explicit when it didn't fit anyway.

I love the cropping of your icon, by the way. Very cool.

Hee, thank you! I wish I could take credit, but I didn't make it. I'm pretty sure I got it from oldprintworks :)

[crawlypie]

I liked this very much. I can't decide which line was best, the 'twice' one or this one----->“Oh, that box.” Her tone is even, steady, nonchalant. (When did that happen?) “Those are the official complaints filed against you last month.” They're both great. :)

I hope you write more in this fandom, because you have a talent for it.

[spyglass_]

I was pleased with both of those lines (especially 'Twice' - I feel like Jane has the potential to be extremely cheeky the morning after), so I'm glad you enjoyed them as well. Thank you very much! :)