To Save the World Entire

[eglantine_br]

Title: To save the world entire

Author Eglantine_br

Rating G but not nice

Word Count 1156

To Save the World Entire

Horatio thrust his chair back with a scrape. He was out the door and into the hallway before he allowed himself to think. His breath was heaving, rasping. He leaned a moment against the wall. This was a shabby hallway, no wider than a

Comments

[anteros_lmc]

On the one hand I almost didn't want to read this, because I don't want it to happen. On the other hand it's impossible not to feel for Mariette and to appreciate why she took comfort where ever she could find it. But no matter how I feel or her, and I really do, because you have written her so sympathetically, I still can't help thinking of Archie at the bridge, waiting and waiting and waiting...

[eglantine_br]

I had a hard time writing it, for the same reason. I did not go into Horatio's thoughts because I think he was not really thinking much at all.

This is written from the outside, if you know what I mean, and I think it is the worse for it.

I feel sorry for Mariette too.

[anteros_lmc]

I did not go into Horatio's thoughts because I think he was not really thinking much at all.
Yes I agree completely.

This is written from the outside, if you know what I mean, and I think it is the worse for it.
I do know what you mean but I think it's perfect for this piece. Everything is wrong at Muzillac, nothing is as it should be and no one really knows where they stand. Under such circumstances, this slightly detached perspective is perfect. Somehow it adds to the unbearable tension of the situation.

[eglantine_br]

I feel that the little town used to be, perhaps not fair or equal, but stable.

Now the structure is torn. Sometimes that is the only way things can change, but it must be hellish to live through.

[anteros_lmc]

Yes. This really is The World Turned Upside Down. Do you know this song? It's by the political song writer Leon Rosselson and it's about the English "Diggers' Revolt" of 1649. It always makes me stop and think when I hear it. The lyrics are here and there's an amazing performance by Dick Gaughan here. Mariette would understand.