prompt 135 Romance: 'Daydream believer'

[ghostfriendly]

Title: Daydream believer
Author: Ghostfriendly
Series: Manga
Word Count: 250
Rating: PG
Characters: Al/Mei, Ed mentioned
Summary: Mei Chang's ideal romance and true reality
Warnings: A little fluffy. Hello again, guys!

Comments

[missyquill]

Really sweet. I love the rich detail in this short piece. Well done!

[ghostfriendly]

Thanks very much!

[sonjajade]

OMG OMG OMG!!! This is WONDERFUL! So detailed and so like Mei! Gave me butterflies while reading it. Love it!

[ghostfriendly]

Thanks very much; interesting icon btw.

[maryh10000]

Amazing. Almost poetic with the repetition of phrases, like "washing rice." And of course her relative poverty and lack of luxury makes sense. Even though she was a princess, in Xing there would be no lack of princesses, and she was from a clan on the edge of extinction.
Beautiful. Well done.

[ghostfriendly]

Repetition can be useful as a device, but some things like washing up just always need to get done! Thanks very much for nice comment.

[maryh10000]

To me, that's the best kind of poetic or literary device - when it fits so well it's what you might say anyway. So yes, the rice always needs to be washed, but the repetition of the phrase for a necessary task adds lyricism to the piece, even if you didn't precisely plan it that way.

[lepharus]

This was really beautiful! I loved all the little details, but it wasn't too much to make the story feel slow. You did an awesome job with this.

[ghostfriendly]

Thanks, too kind.

[ghostfriendly]

Glad you liked it ;)