FAN FICTION POST: "The Calm Before the Storm", one-shot (Brokeback Mountain)

[flowrs4ophelia]

Title: The Calm Before the Storm
Author: Sara (flowrs4ophelia)
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Jack and Ennis in the tent during the hailstorm.
Notes: I really love that brief scene in the movie with Jack and Ennis running into the tent during the hailstorm, and for a while I was thinking about writing some kind of continuation of that scene. So when the prompt for this

Comments

[vdkapenguin]

Yes?
Like I said, the element with the stars is a little Gaiman-esque. That thing about Jack's breath blowing against his neck is so sweet, like you imagine that it's so cold that you can still see their breath even though they're all cuddled together and not cold anymore. And it's really nice how they quickly use the cigarette as an excuse to huddle closer together...
I don't know, all your other commenters said pretty much everything I was thinking. It's even better than the other one.

[flowrs4ophelia]

The cigarette is probably my favorite thing in here. I was trying to show them starting out in opposite sides of the tent and gradually getting closer together, sharing the cigarette at first (which is heat in its own way) but not touching, then touching a little, then sharing heat in a much better way (heee). Plus in my head Jack looks really hot lighting that cigarette with his pretty hand cupped around the end. LOL.

[flowrs4ophelia]

BTW, you freaked me out at first with your icon because at first glance I thought Shep was commenting in this journal, which should never happen even after the world ends.

[vdkapenguin]

If you're so freaked out about the idea of that, why do you post in the notebook under this name? It's not like he'd hate you, lol.