You've delved so well into Naomi's head and I think because you've written it in second person, it feel so much more personal and intimiate and connected to her. I really felt all that you were portraying here - her sense of being scared, alone, overwhelmed, longing, guilty, terrified, sorry - it was just all there. Her watching as Emily sleeps in her bed, crying herself to sleep damn near killed me too.
(You never looked back but occasionally, and kind of against your will, you looked around. It’s just a fucking colossal shame that one time you looked around and someone else was looking too.) - I think this is easily my favourite post 4x02 line in a fic. I think it explains Naomi's actions without saying too much, because lets face it, there isn't really much to say about it.
Emily, just ouch. I could feel her heartbreak and just, I thought you made the transition from hurt!sad to hurt!angry perfectly. It's not even really a different type of hurt at all, it's still the same awful, gut-wrenching
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Oh thank you sweetheart! You flatter me far too much <3
It was kind of random that this came out of me today - I think that I couldn't have managed it any sooner, but I'm glad that I did.
I mean, I sort of wanted to write something without sex in for once but I kind of think that it's a way they'd work out some of their issues. And it's a cause of some problems for them and a solution to others.
I hope that Emily is okay but I think she's on her way to being in this place. And it's going to be horrible for both of them for a while. So we just have to stick with them!!
It's taken a while to be okay with Naomi (and I'm still sort of not) but everything's helping to make it a little bit better.
Yeah, that's what I was going for - using some of the bits we've seen in 4X03 and what's coming up in 4X04 so I'm glad that's worked for you here.
I love what people have been writing about their relationship at the moment and, for me, I've tried to find Naomi's reasons in what's happened but I just wanted to write something here that's put them in a place where neither of them know what to do. And yes, sometimes they can show how they're feeling with actions rather than words.
Thanks muchly for your comments (and for the friend add) <3
I don't think I've ever read anything hot that also made my heart ache before. This was all kinds of wonderful, dude, and so true to the characters and their emotions.
Thanks mate! Most appreciated - I try to stay true to the characters as much as I can and this is a fucking hard time for these guys so I hope I managed to convey some of what I think they might be going through.
1. Ha! Moving in worked :D 2. Sad times wasnt part of the deal, no tea for you. 3. God, this is just so beautiful in the saddest way, that doesnt make sense, just sooo good and they just love eachother and you make my heart break for them
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This was incredibly hot, but --
Ouch.
/cry-wanking
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Hot but ouch, indeed.
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You've delved so well into Naomi's head and I think because you've written it in second person, it feel so much more personal and intimiate and connected to her. I really felt all that you were portraying here - her sense of being scared, alone, overwhelmed, longing, guilty, terrified, sorry - it was just all there. Her watching as Emily sleeps in her bed, crying herself to sleep damn near killed me too.
(You never looked back but occasionally, and kind of against your will, you looked around. It’s just a fucking colossal shame that one time you looked around and someone else was looking too.) - I think this is easily my favourite post 4x02 line in a fic. I think it explains Naomi's actions without saying too much, because lets face it, there isn't really much to say about it.
Emily, just ouch. I could feel her heartbreak and just, I thought you made the transition from hurt!sad to hurt!angry perfectly. It's not even really a different type of hurt at all, it's still the same awful, gut-wrenching ( ... )
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It was kind of random that this came out of me today - I think that I couldn't have managed it any sooner, but I'm glad that I did.
I mean, I sort of wanted to write something without sex in for once but I kind of think that it's a way they'd work out some of their issues. And it's a cause of some problems for them and a solution to others.
I hope that Emily is okay but I think she's on her way to being in this place. And it's going to be horrible for both of them for a while. So we just have to stick with them!!
It's taken a while to be okay with Naomi (and I'm still sort of not) but everything's helping to make it a little bit better.
♥ you times a billion!
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Yeah, that's what I was going for - using some of the bits we've seen in 4X03 and what's coming up in 4X04 so I'm glad that's worked for you here.
I love what people have been writing about their relationship at the moment and, for me, I've tried to find Naomi's reasons in what's happened but I just wanted to write something here that's put them in a place where neither of them know what to do. And yes, sometimes they can show how they're feeling with actions rather than words.
Thanks muchly for your comments (and for the friend add) <3
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Naomily are always hot - trufax ;)
Thanks! <3
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2. Sad times wasnt part of the deal, no tea for you.
3. God, this is just so beautiful in the saddest way, that doesnt make sense, just sooo good and they just love eachother and you make my heart break for them
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And thanks! But babe - sad things can be entirely beautiful, and often are, so what you said totally made sense <3
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