A Scotch for the Road - Part 17

[flighty_dreams]

TITLE: A Scotch for the Road - Part 17
AUTHOR: flighty_dreams
WARNINGS: Slavefic. NC-17.  F/m.
WORD COUNT: 4,390 (this chapter)/ story so far (over 50K)
SUMMARY: A slave enduring a party encounters more than he bargained for.
NOTES: Thanks to aurila for her assistance.
FEEDBACK: Always welcome, even if it's just to say that you read it.

Comments

[fran_fic]

Not trusting Daddy Dear... He's up to no good, mark my words! -.- And Charlie... Who wants a Charlie when there's a Brett! Not me :-) Well, it will be interesting to see what Daddy is up to, and what will happen at that big event.

I like how the chapter is parted up in one, more plot-driven, part, and one, more "domestic", part (even though I am sure there are details in that part, too, that will prove to be important later on for the plot). I like, in any case, to read about these glimpses of Jenna's and Brett's every day life.

Aw, I'm starting to like Ty a lot - such a dear :-) I guess he got a bit more than he bargained for with this friendship - sort of getting caught in between, with big potential of being out of favor both with his master and with Jenna if he makes a wrong move. Poor thing. Though I don't think Jenna would ever be cruel to him, but he doesn't know that for sure.

Lovely update! :-)

[flighty_dreams]

Hehe, exactly... Brett > Charlie. Was there ever a doubt?

Thanks, yeah I got to mix the best of both worlds here. We are suckers for the domestic scenes, aren't we? :-)

Lol ya, the poor boy didn't realize what he was in for. :D He is cute though, even in his (understandable) cluelessness of what Jenna is really like.

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. :-)

[fran_fic]

Not in my mind :-D

I am a sucker for domestic scenes, I really am :-) Maybe because, when reading, sometimes you want to read stuff that you can distance yourself from (things you'd never ever want to see in real life), and sometimes you want something you could imagine yourself in instead - and I guess the quiet, everyday, domestic scenes fits that a bit :-)

But Brett will set him straight on that? Will we actually read what Brett says to him, or will that only be implied?

I already read the Ty groveling scenes several times :-D (I'm not at all obsessed with such things, nooo...)

[aurila]

Lol, poor Ty is getting more attention than he's aware of :)

[fran_fic]

Maybe Brett has to start to look out for the competition ;-)

[flighty_dreams]

Lol, uh oh!! You do like them young and innocent... so much potential for corruption right??

[fran_fic]

Oh no... now I've made myself look horrible again :-( :-D

[flighty_dreams]

Hmm, I think that's a good way to put it. Stuff you can imagine yourself in... also, it can really humanize your characters to show snippets of everyday life, a way of making them feel more 'real.'

Nah, I'm not going to show what Brett says to him. I'll let it be implied. I just figure it will take some time for Ty to get/believe how things are in Jenna's household. :)

Lol, not surprised! A good groveling scene is always worth rereading, right? Nah, not obsessed at all... >:D

[fran_fic]

Mm, that too! It's a chance to describe people's true character in an environment where they're relaxed. And lots of action is fun, but I like it when it's varied with peaceful moments :-)

Aw, too bad :-) I would have liked to see Brett wax lyrical about his perfect Mistress to Ty :-D But I can see how it isn't necessary for the story as a whole.

*LOL* It is enjoyable... :-)

And one of the commenters mentioned Brett being all alone when Jenna goes to that party. I didn't even think of that... Now I'll fear too that he'll be kidnapped!!

[flighty_dreams]

Yeah, I've read a couple (published) authors that make that mistake--having action action action. I end up unsatisfied because I never get a chance to take a breath, and being a character-intensive reader, inevitably the rare character moments then get interrupted because, 'omg I've written 10 pages without action, must get back to it!' and then I'm left hanging and frustrated wailing, "But I want to see X and Y resolve some issues!" Sigh.

Lol, perhaps that would make for a fun outtake sometime. I get the feeling Ty would either not believe him ('omg he's taken some crazy pills! no owner could be that kind!') or be hopelessly jealous ('why couldn't that happen to me!?').

Mmhmm. So I could write a whole story consisting of groveling scenes, and you would be quite happy! It would never get boring for you. :P

Oh noes, a Brettnapping! Slavenapping? Take your pick. XD

[fran_fic]

Yes, I agree! I think almost no matter what kind of longer story you write it's a good idea to vary different kind of scenes a bit. I try to do that as much as I can, though I do realize that I probably don't put enough action in there, and too many (and long) instrospection- and talking through stuff- scenes, and similar. In contrast, a very action-minded reader might get bored by that, I suppose :-)

Aww, yeah, I think it could be cute, and I am sure Ty could have both reactions :-)

*LOL* Well, if you absolutely WANT to write a groveling-PWP... don't let me stop you ;-))

I pick slavenapping, that way I am not limited in my hunt only to slaves called Brett :-D

[triptyx]

*LOL* Well, if you absolutely WANT to write a groveling-PWP... don't let me stop you ;-))
I wouldnt protest against something like that either! ;) :D

[fran_fic]

I'm not surprised :-D

[flighty_dreams]

Not surprised here either!!! :P

[flighty_dreams]

Yeah, variation is always good. The last thing you want is for your reader to get bored.

Yeah, I'm sure he could... oh Ty. Poor boy. >:D

LOL. How did I suddenly get 'volunteered' for writing this?!

Haha, of course. Why restrict the slaves you can obtain for yourself?

[fran_fic]

Yes! Though I'm not sure it's one of my talents - a large amount of variation :-)

That's how we want them!! :-)

I have no idea, but... you'd might as well give in to it ;-))

Yes, why indeed? I'll get at least seven and tattoo them with the days of the week :-D