Comments | fleshflutter: Tales of origin and apocalypse (genfic, r-rated, 1800 words)

fleshflutter

Tales of origin and apocalypse (genfic, r-rated, 1800 words)

Aug 28, 2008 19:07

I've been kicking this around for a while, and thought I'd post now and be rid of it.

Tales of origin and apocalypse
(Dean gen-fic, some disturbing imagery, r-rated, 1800 words)
A short piece of horror. Notes/commentary at the end.

( At dawn, they gather on the banks of the river. )

horror, supernatural, gen, fic

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fleshflutter August 30 2008, 19:22:05 UTC

I think the thing about Ruby being as she is because she remembers who she used to be is a bit rubbish, but it was an interesting idea to play with! I'm really pleased this worked for you, and am very grateful to you for reading! :)

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fleshflutter August 30 2008, 19:26:08 UTC

I did toy with the idea of having it end with Sam bringing him out, but instantly my head then suggested that Sam should bring him out and then Dean should have the vision of the demon eyes appearing on his body, and so apparently my subconscious refused to allow a happy ending on this one. :/

Thank you so very very much for reading, darling. I didn't really want to warn for this, but I very nearly included a wings-section, for which I definitely was going to have to include a non-rivers_bend-safe warning! In short, you = awesome loveliness. ♥ ♥ ♥

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fleshflutter August 30 2008, 20:11:36 UTC

There seems to have been a lot of 'Dean is in Hell but doesn't realise it until he's been rescued', and I kind of wanted to do the 'Dean thinks he's been rescued until he realises Hell has come with him' thing. But it just didn't sit right. :/

♥ ♥ ♥

thandie August 28 2008, 18:58:33 UTC

Wow, you creeped me out. THIS is the ultimate Dean in hell fic. I don't like the genre usually, but yours was pretty cool with all those metaphoric images.
The part with the man morphing nickel into spiders is my favourite. And the blank palms? That was SO creepy, and meaning that there's no past and no future for him anymore, that was nifty.
And that part in the bar, where Dean is convinced he's with Sam...it's the best one. It's the most painful.

I think the purgatory is what hit me most anyway, with the time passing and Dean having no idea what he numbers stand for anymore. VERY cool.

fleshflutter August 30 2008, 19:28:25 UTC

Oh thank you ever so much for reading, precious, especially as it's not your genre of choice! I'm really really grateful that you would, and totally thrilled that it worked for you! Thank you so very very much! :)
♥

girlfan1979 August 28 2008, 19:06:00 UTC

This is incredible.

fleshflutter August 30 2008, 19:29:02 UTC

Thank you so very very much! :)

ifyouweremine August 28 2008, 19:09:23 UTC

Oh, my goodness, this was so horrifying but so gorgeously written.

The imagery was astounding (to to name a few things that stuck in my mind: the bloated corpses, the smooth plastic palms the gypsy carved a fortune into, the maggots pushing out Dean's teeth from inside his gums. I seriously felt a little nauseous during that scene, it was so vivid and awful and abrupt).

And I really liked the notes you included at the end, the reasoning behind these things, it was really interesting and helpful.

fleshflutter August 30 2008, 19:37:24 UTC

Darling, you make me happy! Thank you so very very much for reading and commenting, though I imagine outright horror isn't exactly your preferred genre! I'm really pleased it worked for you - I'm never sure if the stuff that unsettles me is going to be effective for other people!
Thank you for being so lovely. ♥