Original Fic: The Cleansing

[fizzerbass]

Don't let the icon fool you, this isn't a Sports Night Fic.  It's just something I came up with for Prompt #137: Bleach over at tamingthemuse .    I feel funny calling it an original fic because there really aren't any "characters" in it.  Eh, whatever.  If you feel like reading, please do me a favor and leave some concrit.  I've got my panties all in a wad

Comments

[sienata]

wow. that made me so sad. i'm full of questions - what's wrong, why is he dying, who is he, what was his life like...

you definitely made me curious. you didn't make me like him, tho. i'm not sure if you wanted to or not. sometimes i don't even care how people feel about my characters. i just write them the way they are and let the chips fall where they may. maybe that's what you did here. i feel sorry for him, but it's a removed sympathy, nothing personal.

can you really put tires in a washing machine?

this was a very vivid and visual piece. i thought you did a good job with it. i hope you will keep at it. that writing contest i did a while back is coming up again. if you're interested, let me know and i'll link you. :)

[fizzerbass]

Thanks, Miss S. I'm kinda full of questions, too, about this piece. I mean, I really have no idea who this dude is, what he did or why he is so bitter about his past. Guess the fun part begins now, huh - coming up with answers to all these questions

[sienata]

hey. i haven't forgotten to give you some more critique on this, but i've been real busy with the lunch and had the most mind numbing class at work yesterday, so i wasn't worth a flip last night.

however, here is the link to the contest. sign up ends tonight. first prompt tomorrow. i might do it, not sure. i think i will, i can always drop out. anyway, here is link. hugs. love me

http://community.livejournal.com/thebrenljidol/84971.html

[fizzerbass]

Oh, please don't worry about critiquing this any more - you've got your plate full and a 3/15 deadline to boot!
I hope you're feeling better!

Is the writing contest friends locked? It tells me I'm not authorized to view this entry when I click on the link. :(

[bbmbottomboy]

here. try this one.

http://community.livejournal.com/thebrenljidol/