SPN FIC - Legend (Part Four: Missouri and Pamela)

[ficwriter1966]

I'd heard whispered bits of the story since I was a kid.  Just after Halloween, back in '83, the demon Azazel had crept into the nursery of a baby boy, intending to drip blood into the child's mouth and turn him into demon spawn.  But Mary Campbell was waiting for him.  She had a gun a stranger had brought to her family ten years before: a gun that

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[roseficke]

Okay, I'm confused. I thought Mary killed Azazel and left.(In this legend version)

[ficwriter1966]

She did. Did I imply otherwise?

[roseficke]

So, what does this sentence mean?

...John Winchester as a man abandoned, confused, the sole witness to his wife's murder by gunshot of a stranger in a long, dark coat...

I don't mean to be obtuse, I'm just trying to figure this out. I'm finding this series quite intriguing. :)

[ficwriter1966]

The stranger in the long dark coat is Azazel. Sorry to have confused you! I forget sometimes that while it all makes sense in my head, it might not necessarily make sense on the page... \O/

[rince1wind]

I was confused too. It's the murder of the man, carried out by his (John's) wife.

"His wife's murder" might be the culprit; maybe "...the sole witness to the murder by his wife of a stranger in a long, dark coat." And leave "by gunshot" for another sentence or at least a dash: "...long, dark coat -- murder by gunshot."

[ficwriter1966]

Duly noted! I'll tinker with it a bit later on. :)

[randomstasis]

I didn't misread it, but I can see why you might- it's a long and complicated noun phrase;) the other way is clearer, but awkward; might be best to go with the gerund; "sole witness to his wife murdering... a stranger

[roseficke]

Thanks, all's good. I think I just had a moment of brain fog!

Can't wait for Thanksgiving! :)