DRA(W)BBLE DUEL #4

Oct 06, 2009 13:00

Dra(w)bble Duel #4 is OPEN! :D

Prompt of the week: Fight! Fight! Fight!

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Submission hull1984 October 7 2009, 22:13:13 UTC
Title: I Win
Team: Team Ron
Prompt: Fight! Fight! Fight!
Rating: PG
Word count: 100

Fight fight fight

The chant echoes around the hallway. The crowd gathers, taking up the call.

Fight fight fight.

They’re use to this. This is familiar.

Panting, punching, bruising. Blood splatters onto his fist. Pale skin is stained beneath him. White hair spread out on dark walnut.

Fight fight fight.

Purple mottled skin, nail scarred wrists.

And there, curled deep down in his belly. Warm anticipation.

Later. Away from the crowd. Pillowed in silk.

New, and infinitely more dear. Blissfully terrifying and too unknown.

Harder harder harder.

Pale skin, neck stained purple.

Whispers, gasped into quiet places.

Fight fight fight.

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Re: Submission VOTE! wwmrsweasleydo October 7 2009, 23:07:31 UTC
There are so many beautiful phrases in this. The contrast is lovely, too, and the parallels. Very physical.

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Re: Submission VOTE! hull1984 October 7 2009, 23:27:52 UTC
Thank you.

Your lovely comment is a huge relief - I swore off drabbles after a particularly bad experience and this my first attempt since. You have no idea how much I was shaking when I opened your e-mail ;)

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Re: Submission VOTE! wwmrsweasleydo October 8 2009, 07:25:21 UTC
Nothing to worry about. Tricky length, drabbles. This is like a prose poem, which works really well. I really like the way you've handled this. The idea is great, but the actual practise is what impressed me most.

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VOTE!!!! stuckinsea October 8 2009, 05:18:38 UTC
Oh my dear, Jo. This is wonderful. Going from one extreme to another, utterly Ron and Draco...perfect. I love your writing and it makes me smile when I see it...thank you, thank you for writing this. Loved it!

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Re: VOTE!!!! hull1984 October 8 2009, 06:09:51 UTC
Thank you, sweetie :)

You always say the kindest things.

*hugs*

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VOTE mamalaz October 8 2009, 21:30:05 UTC
HOT DAMN! Loved every second!

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Re: VOTE hull1984 October 9 2009, 08:19:05 UTC
Thanks you, hon :)

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Vote seraphimerising October 10 2009, 20:37:59 UTC
Lovely imagery.

Great job.

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Re: Vote hull1984 October 10 2009, 21:06:00 UTC
Thank you :)

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