You Put One Foot in Front of the Other - Lost - Sun/Penny

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Title: You Put One Foot in Front of the Other
Characters: Sun, Penny (Sun/Penny, Penny/Desmond)
Word Count: 3150
Rating: PG-13
A/N: I'd been writing this for my writing_rainbow claim, but tucked it away for the time being once the luau started. However Queen isis2015 requested Sun fic, so I decided to pull it out again and whip it into shape. I hope the queen enjoys. ♥

Comments

[janie_tangerine]

This was some terrific work. I really, really liked it.

The pairing is indeed strange but you made it work just perfectly. Your Penny is absolutely perfect, I could hear her on every single line. And God, the way she longed for Desmond at the beginning felt just so real. Let me say that I was kind of hoping that he was somewhere with Sayid though ;)

Sun -> wow. You really got her down here, it feels exactly as ff!Sun should/would feel at least according to yours truly. The dialogue between the two of them was spot on and Penny's reservation regarding her father felt very IC.

Sun asks her about the wedding: there is very little to tell. It was a quiet occasion, little fanfare. The happiest day of her life passed unnoticed by the wider world.

Aawww. Now that made me teary. And that phone call? You are EVIL. Because firstly I am there all teary again because they are separated and I could hear/feel Desmond's desperation so well and then not only the first word he says is Sayid but you also get me Sayid in the background? Hell, I hate it when my OTPs collide ;) no chance of seeing Desmond's side of the fence in this? *hint* ;)

The actual slashing was perfectly coherent with the rest of the story.

Sun's hand reaches up to push her hair away from her face: it feels too much like Desmond, a gesture he's done again and again. She closes her eyes and reaches forward, her hand finding its way to thread through Sun's hair. Their lips brush, bump, bumble together. Uncertain. Unsure. Unsteady. There is no excuse for either of them, but Sun's fingers cup her jaw all the same.

That was just a great part. I love how you've written it. And the ending? Perfect. Poor Penny, though. Now I feel so sad for her *sniff*. This was some really great work!