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At Gunpoint 7/10

Jul 24, 2010 00:19

Title: At Gunpoint 7/10
Pairing: Jonghyun/Key
Genre: AU
Rating: NC-17 for this chapter
Summary: Jonghyun's eyes travel down to the corner the fifteen-inch screen, sweat rolling down his forehead; it's almost midnight.
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!chaptered, f: shinee, p: jonghyun/key

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lovebyelove July 23 2010, 22:01:30 UTC

I said I'll come back with a coherent response but I don't think I can. THIS IS AN AMAZING CHAPTER!~ Not because of the sex, it's that they build a connection mentally and emotionally. I don't know what I'm writing right now but I really like this chapter, maybe even more then the other one about Kibum's insights.

You blew my mind with this chapter. I really think you did a great job, if this was the option A for you author's note up there. You hit the spot. It was physically, emotionally, mentally, and psychologically beautiful. I could feel how intense it was and how Kibum is/or now was desperate (not the right word but I mean it in a good way) to be with Jonghyun. It was just bare and raw with emotions, especially Jonhyun's!

I love everything but what I love the most is how Jonghyun is portrayed in this chapter. The defense he put up and how he felt towards the end. How he isn't just a cold heart bastard. I found it sweet how he wasn't that experience. It gave me that Jonghyun's not that bad after all.

LOVE IT! ♥. Totally sorry about the long comment. I do NOT think you failed at all. I think you hit the nail right on it's head. Especially at the end of the chapter.

x_saru_x July 24 2010, 12:47:45 UTC

Allow me to sigh the longest sigh that ever was sighed, lmao.

No, seriously, I loved this chapter as much as I angsted over it. I was planning on describing a completely different Jonghyun, and once Kibum was brought into this chapter everything just changed. All it literally took was a simple sentence I wasn't expecting to write and this whole thing just wrote itself. Even I have grown a different, much deeper opinion on Jonghyun, if that's possible. What's probably to blame is that I had been thinking about this chapter ever since the first one, and Jonghyun hadn't really grown on me back then, not this much. But yes, babbling. *stops*

I'm really, really glad it turned out this strong, then!

Thank you so much! ♥

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