Alone With the Spark Devils. FFX. Lady Ginnem/Lulu.

[thunderousmoon]

Title: Alone With the Spark Devils.
Fandom: FFX
Pairing: Lady Ginnem/Lulu.
Prompt: Curse.
Rating: T.
Words: 400.
Spoilers: Calm Lands side quest.
Author's Note: The moment I saw this prompt I knew I had to write this :D.

Comments

[euphonious_glow]

Beautiful and sad. I've started to really appreciate Ginnem/Lulu because of your drabbles. I feel for Ginnem's sense of betrayal at what she sees as Lulu deserting her as well as her need to have her back, and her regret at what has happened between them.

My only critique is that some of the phrases are long and awkward. They could use more pauses. But in the interest of strict word counts, I understand why it isn't always possible.

[thunderousmoon]

Thank you :)

I do have some difficulty with making them less awkward; hopefully with some more practice I'll be able to do that soon >.>
Thanks for the crit I always like to find some way to make my writing better ^.^

[auronlu]

Eeeeeee.

This is wonderfully eerie, disturbing, and a little off-kilter. The language is just a little crazed and strange, conveying the unraveled and bitter thoughts of an unsent who's given in to anger, jealousy and hate just as Lulu describes.

In fact it makes me think of Lulu telling Tidus about the reason for the sending, and it's so much creepier thinking she had Ginnem in mind.

Eee.

[girlinstilettos]

Second this.

[thunderousmoon]

:D That's what I was going for, thanks xx

Neee :3