Fic: A River in Egypt. JM/DB RPS for fanfic100

[felisblanco]

Ok, here is one of the RPS stories I had finished. Read it over and it didn't really feel so finished so I've been tweaking it a bit and added to the ending and it feels better now. Still think the ending is a bit odd but I don't think it will get any better. Yeah, and I'm pretty nasty to CK and a few others in this but at least CK will get a

Comments

[spangel_kat]

OMG!!! ok, i absolutely hated it and absolutely loved it. hated it because James!!! got totally fucked (pun unintended).

Loved it because awesome writing and kind of a tender ending between David and James.

great story.

kat

[felisblanco]

Thank you. I rather like that you hated it, that means it worked. Not a nice subject to read about, or write about for that matter, and I think I would have been worried if I got a bunch of 'That was sooo hot!' comments. lol

Sometimes I wonder how my brain can come up with such disturbing things, especially when, like this time, I start out with quite different ideas of how it's going to develop. Must be quite a few dark patches in there. *taps head*

[jans_intentions]

They are always so screwed up. Loved this:

“Please, Dave.” Hold me. Touch me. Love me. Get the fuck away from me. “I...”

[felisblanco]

Thank you.

Must be awful, wanting to be comforted while at the same time hardly standing anyone touching you, not even the man you love.

*hugs*

[denied_heaven]

...
..
*whimper*
you did warn me
oh ouch achey ugh
so damn good
god you make it hurt so good

[felisblanco]

Thank you. And sorry for the heartache, sweetie. Sometimes they just turn out this way. Blame my evil black heart.

*hugs*

[spikeddraco666]

OMFG!! this was amazing!! i love all ur RPS but, this is my new Fave!! cant wait to read the other one!!

[felisblanco]

Thank you so much. It's up but it's just a short one I'm afraid. Hope it pleases anyway.

*hugs*

[felisblanco]

Thank you so much, sweetie.

*hugs*