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Just a Little Favor for a Friend Pt. 19

Jul 22, 2009 02:54

The Little Lame Prince, continued
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jeffreycwells July 22 2009, 18:17:46 UTC

I get so much by way of warm fuzzies from River, it's easy to forget that she can be trying at times to those people who are actually living with her, not just watching her for an hour a pop on TV.

"I was planning on it's why I checked the access." Check the grammar here, missing a word or something.

feech July 22 2009, 19:10:15 UTC

Don't know if I should change that, let me know. "It's" is "it is" in the sense of "it is why" or "that is why", so I'm not sure where to add the word. There would be a comma where the apostrophe is, except that Zoe contracts the whole thing.

jeffreycwells July 22 2009, 20:58:52 UTC

If it was intentional, go ahead and leave it. It just looked like a half-edited line.

feech July 22 2009, 19:14:51 UTC

I get warm fuzzies when River is being a trial.

Also, you've spent days with her and sometimes it looks, from the outside, as if she were giving you some of those issues, but then I don't think we've-- well, you've-- I have, and she was just no trouble whatsoever-- had her here without Mal?

jeffreycwells July 22 2009, 20:58:13 UTC

She's been around without Mal before.

feech July 23 2009, 03:04:45 UTC

I forgot all about that time with Simon, which is dumb because I think about it often because she was so funny.

feech July 22 2009, 20:49:23 UTC

I cleverly added the comma. *Edity McEditypants*

How can I fix it further?

jeffreycwells July 22 2009, 21:19:49 UTC

It's fine now.

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