notes: To
cadesama and Prisc for reading and rereading this and for encouraging me, not to mention all the advice and support.
cadesama especially - this probably wouldn't even still be a story without you.
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I really love how you write Dr. Bhatt. She matches up very squarely with the therapists I've known (except the crazy ones). Professional and unflappable, experienced without being jaded or cynical. Jess in that scene just kills me. It's the little details, like him curling his fingers into the hem of his sleeves -- little boy nervous things he'd hate himself for if he realized he was doing it.
Also, I think it was really good to return to Lorelai in this chapter, bringing just a little bit of levity back and sort of stabilizing things. I know how you feel about Luke/Lorelai, but I have to admit you are making me ship them a little bit here. They're supporting each other. And communicating. And being good friends to each other. These are all good things!
The suspense is killing me; next chapter you have to reveal where Kirk's magpie nest is!
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I know how you feel about Luke/Lorelai, but I have to admit you are making me ship them a little bit here
Hahaha, I ship them a little! I'm a complete sucker for people being good to and for each other and I kind of start shipping any people who behave like that with each other (sidebar: it's more than a little weird to talk about the relationship I'm writing in those terms. "They're great like this?" "What, the way you're writing them? You're a dick."). It's just that adding romance to this situation would be, you know. Horrible. I think they'd wind up being completely codependent in a really unhealthy way or hating each other, at least for a while.
next chapter you have to reveal where Kirk's magpie nest is!lololol, in one of my fits of frustration with the story, I briefly thought about the hilarity of a tangent storyline where Rory and Lorelai break into Kirk's home and find him perched on a pile of straw and ( ... )
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Thank you! Man, miso, you always give amazing feedback. I never really know what to say in reply except thank you! Thank you thank you. ♥
Randomly, I also loved Lorelai's line about her being the most important witness at the trial
Haha, most of the dialogue that I like most from my own writing are the ones I come up with as I'm writing a scene, off the cuff. A lot of times it's purpose-driven (naturally) or a lot of info dump that I'm trying to craft into something I could hear the characters saying (let's have Luke and Lorelai casually talk about court stuff that finn doesn't want to write out AT ALL! Wheee!!!), so it's nice when little fun exchanges can actually work into the dialogue. Yeah idk why I'm still talking. This is a fairly spazzy reply to your comment. So in conclusion: thank you! ♥
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