Hooks 229, 228, 227, 226, 225, 224, 223, and 222
Hook #229
Science Fiction
Jessie Connell can handle being kidnapped by a homeless man calling himself “Achilles.” An unemployed bartender, Jessie has had plenty of run-ins with eccentric criminals and low-lifes. But being taken back in time to 2500 B.C., where she must fight a sinister alien
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And this struck me as a great batch of hooks in general.
My favourite, the one I would buy right this moment if I could, is #229. Time travel, aliens, reincarnation, bartending - sounds fantastic to me! #223 sounds good as well, nice intrigue + dancing combo. ^^
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BTW...Jessie also has an eccentric Navajo foster-mother and meets Bigfoot (aka "Enkidu").
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I had a few personal comments for these writers:
Hook #228
I was so worried the judge wasn't going to choose you when I started to read the "Notes," because even though I agree that the "allergies" part stuck out without a follow-up or explanation, I was "hooked," which is the point, right? I cannot wait to read this book, so I hope you get it published ASAP!
Hook #226
I am wagging an admonishing finger at you over "appal." Spellcheck is mandatory, my friend! The judge has some good points. Best wishes for your revisions.
Hook #223
"Russia .The Americans" gets the wagging finger as well. Punctuation checking is mandatory, my friend! Other than that, I also agree with the judge. Careful in the future, and good luck with the restructuring.
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And I'm a total Roman Empire geek :)
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In the past I've always sent out synopsis plus 3 chapters, so this was my first attempt at a hook. It probably showed!
Anyway, thank you again to all of you for putting in the time and effort to make this contest so fascinating.
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And 228 is, so far, my favorite of the hooks that have been posted...aside from my own, of course. ;-) It's just the sort of thing that would pull me in, although I haven't read YA since I was a YA myself. Congratulations and good luck!
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It taught me that no matter how odd I felt standing in the YA section of my local borders as a 20-something, there are some things there that are worth reading.
I don't know why every book about tweens or kids has to be YA or elementary level. There are scads of books in that section that are engaging and complex, and only YA in the sense that they lack complex sexual tension.
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