crit my script

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I'm working on a short film script for my class and would love some feedback. It's about a graphic artist who is fired from his job after his boss discovers a website showcasing some of his more mature artwork. It takes place in the near future and in the film the Government has instituted a tracking system for all convicted criminals. The catch is, the majority of the population has been convicted because our rights and freedoms have been limited. The main character has to find a way to regain his freedom, while incorporating a little science fiction.

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