Notes from Andromeda

[magentabear]

Title: Notes from Andromeda
Author: magentabear
Rating: PG-13ish?
Warnings: none
Word Count: 4000
Prompts:22. "Pity your sister- as a final kindness./When he has granted it, I shall repay/my debt, and with full interest, by my death." (Virgil, The Aeneid, Book 4, lines 599-601

Comments

[zia_montrose]

I like the way you flesh out just how and why Sirius comes to hate Grimmauld Place so much, as you summarize in this part: It was three rooms away that they disowned him. It was at the front staircase that Father gave him robes with the Crest of Black... How painful it must have been to be confined there years later.

I also liked his declaration to his friends that he would not be going back. That seemed very teenagerish. And I enjoyed that James understood him from the get-go.

The idea that Andromeda and Sirius corresponded makes me happy. They must have had quite a few shared frustrations and it's nice to think they could have used each other as an outlet.

There were a few times when I wanted to be able to see the characters a little more vividly in my mind's eye, like during Sirius's conversation with his parents, but maybe I wasn't doing my part as the reader to whirl up a good vision of them. : )

Lastly, I also liked the scene with Sirius and Remus sitting up late with Firewhisky to discuss when Peter turned on them. Surely, that must have happened at some point. And it's really nice to think that Remus's company provided some consolation to Sirius while shut up in the Grim Old Place.

Well done! And you cranked out 4,000 words. (<--I'm a sloth at generating word count, myself, so I noticed.)