"Christmas in Albuquerque" Part 2

[fakepoptart]

Dated: Finally finished today after 3 days of almost non-stop typing.

Title: Christmas in Albuquerque (because I couldn't think of anything less lame)

Summary: The human tragedy known as Jesse Pinkman finds himself alone on Christmas... He doesn't take it well, but he discovers that maybe there's a little more in store for him this evening than he

Comments

[readishmael]

I've read this through a couple more times since last night, and I have to say that while, given the emotional trajectory of the piece, I think it reaches a fitting and satisfying conclusion, I really can't help but wish for some "morning after" fic, especially if it's from Walt's POV. I think it's totally fair that you leave Walt's intentions and feelings vague, and you do so in a way that doesn't feel like a cheat (that is, a way to keep from having to give him believable motivations), but I'm so, so intrigued by the hints that he's doing it out of a much simpler desire, and a desire for Jesse specifically, than Jesse's complex and confused motives. There are still multiple ways to read even that part of it, of course, and nothing's simple with Walt, but the fact is that I was kind of genuinely moved by him saying Jesse's name during, as well as finding it really hot. You really managed to subvert my own expectations for how the Walt/Jesse pairing could work, especially for their first time. I'd always kind of thought that there are believable scenarios in which they might have sex, but in almost none of them it's because either of them really actually wants to with the other, but you totally sold something almost romantic here without ever losing sight of how twisted their dynamic really is, and I'd love to see you do more with that. Again, fantastic job with this.

[fakepoptart]

I know how you feel; despite the mental agony this caused me I'd like to do a follow up to it, but morning-after fics are so. damn. hard. I think it's because "morning afters" in life are hard.
I'm psyched that you noticed how Walt's motives seeming more like sincere desire than anything else. I'd *really* like to do something more with that but I'd have to get skull bashed by the inspiration-hammer.
Believable scenarios for them were definitely the hugest hurdle so it's extremely fulfilling to hear that mine made the cut AND subverted expectations. :) Thanks sooo much for the extended review, really makes my writing of this feel worthwhile, and maybe it will encourage me to do more! Eventually. Maybe. Someday.

[readishmael]

Well, if you do start tinkering around with some ideas for a follow-up, literal "morning after" or not, and you want someone to talk them through with, I'm here. Same goes for any other BB fic you think an outsider's opinion might help you with.

[fakepoptart]

like a consultant? :D Haha~ Seriously though I might have to take you up on that some time. I've never tried bouncing ideas off anyone and who knows, it could work in the idea's favor.
I've already put down some lines about a morning after but where it goes from there has the potential to stagnate pretty seriously so I don't know if I could feasibly finish one of that nature... some brain-storming could see something of some interest happen, though.

[readishmael]

Well, let me know. I've friended you in the meantime. Good luck with all you future writing!